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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words. Writing Task 2

Individuals are moving from rural areas to the modern places. In order to seek good education or to take a better job and ultimately living a healthy and wealthy lifestyle. In the paragraph below I shall discuss about the ways to deal with such problems to avoid the migration. To avoid this growing number of people moving from countryside to the cities. Government should open better equiped schools and collages in the rural parts of the nation. Clearly to eliminate the movement of people to modern cities in prospect of education. Moreover, higher authorities should help industries to built their infrastructure in the backward areas. So that person living there can get job easily in the region. However, this will also give the region more recognition and the area will grow for the better. For instance, a region in India was underdeveloped and people started migrating from that area. The legal authorities recognised the major issues troubling the families there. And helped them to resolve the same. The locals highlighted the market issues. Beaurocrates provided subsidies to the private companies and opened mordern style markets in the rural areas to resolve the problem and to stop the further movement of individuals to the cities. Hence, cities are getting over populated due to migration and all the above methods can avoid this rising concern. The natural resources are limited in some cities that if the population will keep growing then the water will get exhaust soon in some of the modern regions of the world. A quick action is required to be taken to stop this movement of people.
Individuals are moving from rural
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areas
to the modern places. In order to seek
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good
education or to take a better job and
ultimately
living a healthy and wealthy lifestyle. In the paragraph below I shall
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discuss about the
ways to deal with such problems to avoid the migration.

To avoid this growing number of
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people
moving from countryside to the
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cities
.
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Government
should open better
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equiped
schools and collages in the rural parts of the nation.
Clearly
to eliminate the movement of
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people
to modern
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cities
in prospect of education.

Moreover
, higher authorities should
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help
industries to built their infrastructure in the backward
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areas
.
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So that
person living there can
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get
job
easily
in the
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region
.
However
, this will
also
give the
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region
more recognition and the
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area
will grow for the better.

For instance
, a
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region
in India
was underdeveloped
and
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people
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started
migrating from that
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area
. The legal authorities
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recognised
the major issues troubling the families there. And
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helped
them to resolve the same. The locals highlighted the market issues.
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Beaurocrates
provided subsidies to the private
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companies
and opened
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mordern
style markets in the rural
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areas
to resolve the problem and to
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stop
the
further
movement of individuals to the cities.

Hence
,
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cities
are getting
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over populated
due to migration and all the above methods can avoid this rising concern. The natural resources
are limited
in
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some
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cities
that if the population will
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keep
growing then the water will
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get
exhaust
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soon
in
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some of the
modern
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regions
of the world. A quick action
is required
to
be taken
to
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stop
this movement of
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people
.
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IELTS essay The movement of people from the countryside into the cities is happening in many parts of the world, resulting in the problems, especially in cities. What are the causes of this movement, and how can it be reversed Writing Task 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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