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The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income. mnBr
There are a lot of aspects people look at when deciding on a career or applying for a job and the salary rage is often considered the most important of all. While I agree that jobs that pay high wages do seem extremely attractive, I still believe that there are several other factors to think about which are equally compelling as the high pay or income. On the one hand, I completely understand those people who prioritize money while choosing a career as they have a lifestyle to maintain. It is often heard people say that they choose high salaried job because they do not want to worried about the consequences of shortage of money. For example, if you have a burden of debt such as home rent, electricity bill and so on, and you do not even get enough money to pay the bills, then your life will be nothing but miserable. Moreover, some students tend to choose a university major based on how much income they will get after graduation when they enter the working environment. I think it is undeniable justifiable to expect a reasonable earnings because they have studied hard for it. On the other hand, there are still some who choose to work for their passion, not for the money. For example, a wild life photographer chooses his profession not because he want to make money out of it but because he really enjoy doing it. If his motive was solely to earn, he would has chosen to become a wedding photographer, cinematographer or even a freelancer rather than risking his life in the jungle. Likewise, people who work in an NGO or other charitable organization, choose their career to help others. As an example, I am working in an INGO and I am genuinely satisfied with my job. In fact, I would regret if I had chosen to work in some other companies with high wages as for me, to bring smile on someone face gives more pleasure than a bunch of money. In conclusion, the high salaried job will still be very appealing among job applicant, in my opinion, passion is much more important than that.
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job
and the salary rage is
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considered the most
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jobs
that pay
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high
wages do seem
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other
factors to
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about which are
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compelling as the
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high
pay or income.

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people
who prioritize
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money
while choosing a career as they have a lifestyle to maintain. It is
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often
heard
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people
say that they
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choose
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high
salaried
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job
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because
they do not want to
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worried
about the consequences of shortage of
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money
.
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, if you have a burden of debt such as home rent, electricity bill and
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so
on, and you do not even
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get
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enough
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money
to pay the bills, then your life will be nothing
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but
miserable.
Moreover
,
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some
students tend to
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choose
a university major based on how much income they will
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get
after graduation when they enter the working environment. I
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think
it is undeniable justifiable to
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expect
a reasonable
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earnings
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because
they have studied
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hard
for it.

On the
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hand, there are
still
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some
who
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choose
to work for their passion, not for the
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money
.
For example
, a wild life photographer
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chooses
his profession not
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because
he
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want
to
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make
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money
out of it
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but
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because
he
really
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enjoy
doing it. If his motive was
solely
to earn, he would
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has
chosen to become a wedding photographer, cinematographer or even a freelancer
rather
than risking his life in the jungle.
Likewise
,
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people
who work in an NGO or
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other
charitable organization,
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choose
their career to
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help
others. As an example, I am working in an INGO and I am
genuinely
satisfied with my
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job
. In fact, I would regret if I had chosen to work in
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some
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other
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companies
with
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high
wages as for me, to bring smile on someone
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face
gives more pleasure than a bunch of
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money
.
In conclusion
, the
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high
salaried
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job
will
still
be
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very
appealing among
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job
applicant, in my opinion, passion is much more
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important
than that.
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IELTS essay The most important consideration when choosing any career or job is having a high income.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
363 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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