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Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child‘s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child‘s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence. EMPr
Unlike ester years, it is evident that there is a recent debate among the people on children growth. A section of people opine that mother and father has the highly imperative part in a kid’s improvement. Whereas, other groups of people opponent that various things such as television set as well as kith's have the most remarkable effect. However, I would personally subscribe to the proposition that both of these roles are essential in young children development. This essay outlines the plausible reasons along with examples in the succeeding paragraphs. On the one hand, kids get development from a parent which has been widely accepted. Indeed, that it has plethora of persuasive reasons. Firstly, the most remarkable reasons for children growth is direct interaction. To illustrate this, kids has closest attachment with parents rather than others. Hence, parents can teach ample of academic skills to children. Therefore, kids can get very good grades in exams. In the same vein, another key reason for kids get progress from a parent is learning moral values. Since, kids has chance to spend plenty of time with parents they can listen plenty of bed stories from parents before sleep. Thereby, kids can acquire knowledge about basic manners as well as behavioral skills from parents. At this juncture, citing an example is more relevant to justify the point stated above is that, in a recent survey reported that, 80 percent of kids got healthy growth because of they learnt about socializing skills from parents than others. Hence, the above mentioned claims perceive people to endorse children not only learn subject knowledge but also social skills from the mother and father, which are more imperative in the society. On the other hand, young children get knowledge via various resources such as television set along with dear ones. However, this statement has an array of underlying reasons. One among convincing reason for kith's influence on kid’s improvement is social skills. Nevertheless, children have more communication with their dear ones especially while playing in play grounds. Consequently, they can learn amiable nature as well as good relationship with other kids. Besides, television sets also play vital role in kid’s development. As we all know that there are myriad of educational channels available for teach knowledge on various things to children. At this moment, exemplifying is more appropriate to substantiate the reason is that, I watched a documentary with the name of “Kids love TV” which conveys that, majority of kids are learning making various creative crafts via television. Thereby, a group of people support this view. All in all, above mentioned reasons for both of these views on children advance skills proved to be an indisputable testimony by the sheer number of studies. Therefore, persuaded by all the points discussed hitherto, what I would like reiterate vehemently is that kids progress not only depend on parents but also loved ones along with TV.
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on
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growth. A section of
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people
opine that mother and father has the
highly
imperative part in a
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kid’s
improvement. Whereas,
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other
groups of
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people
opponent that
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various
things such as
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television
set
as well
as kith's have the most remarkable effect.
However
, I would
personally
subscribe to the proposition that both of these roles are essential in young
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children
development. This essay outlines the plausible
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reasons
along with examples in the succeeding paragraphs.

On the one hand,
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kids
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get
development from a
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parent
which has been
widely
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accepted
.
Indeed
, that it has plethora of persuasive
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reasons
.
Firstly
, the most remarkable
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reasons
for
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children
growth is direct interaction. To illustrate this,
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kids
has
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closest
attachment with
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parents
rather
than others.
Hence
,
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parents
can teach ample of academic
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skills
to
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children
.
Therefore
,
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kids
can
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get
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very
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good
grades in exams. In the same vein, another key
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reason
for
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kids
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get
progress from a
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parent
is learning moral values. Since,
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kids
has chance to spend
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plenty
of time with
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parents
they can listen
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plenty
of bed stories from
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parents
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before
sleep. Thereby,
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kids
can acquire
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knowledge
about basic manners
as well
as behavioral
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skills
from
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parents
. At this juncture, citing an example is more relevant to justify the point stated above is that, in a recent survey reported that, 80 percent of
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kids
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got
healthy growth
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because of they
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learnt
about socializing
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skills
from
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parents
than others.
Hence
, the above mentioned claims perceive
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people
to endorse
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children
not
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only
learn subject
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knowledge
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also
social
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skills
from the mother and father, which are more imperative in the society.

On the
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hand, young
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children
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get
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knowledge
via
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various
resources such as
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television
set along with dear
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ones
.
However
, this statement has an array of underlying
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reasons
. One among convincing
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reason
for kith's influence on
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kid’s
improvement is social
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skills
.
Nevertheless
,
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children
have more communication with their dear
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ones
especially
while playing in play grounds.
Consequently
, they can learn amiable nature
as well
as
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good
relationship with
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other
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kids
.
Besides
,
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television
sets
also
play vital role in
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kid’s
development. As we all know that there are myriad of educational channels available for teach
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knowledge
on
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various
things to
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children
. At this moment, exemplifying is more appropriate to substantiate the
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reason
is that, I
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watched
a documentary with the name of
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“Kids
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love
TV” which conveys that, majority of
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kids
are learning
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making
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various
creative crafts via
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television
. Thereby, a group of
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people
support this view.

All in all, above mentioned
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reasons
for both of these views on
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children
advance
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skills
proved to be an indisputable testimony by the sheer number of studies.
Therefore
, persuaded by all the points discussed hitherto, what I would like reiterate
vehemently
is that
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kids
progress not
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only
depend on
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parents
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but
also
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loved
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ones
along with TV.
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IELTS essay Some people say that parents have the most important role in a child‘s development. However, others argue that other things like television or friends have the most significant influence.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
485 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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