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The most essential component of a person’s life is his or her time at the workplace, and life turns meaningless once no job satisfaction is obtained. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, there is a big focus on job satisfaction. Some people believe that without it, their life would be meaningless. I completely disagree with this idea because although job satisfaction is important, I believe it is not the only thing that can bring meaning to a person’s life. In fact, I believe there are many other things that can bring far greater meaning to a person’s life than their career choice. Firstly, being satisfied with your job is of some importance. Most people spend approximately 40 hours a week or more at work, and therefore it is important to have a job that brings the highest level of satisfaction to enrich our lives. Having a job that provides meaning to a person’s life, also brings that person a sense of purpose and fulfillment, which are two of the key ingredients for true happiness. Those who find themselves stuck in boring, monotonous, and menial jobs for years on end may end up developing a low sense of self-worth and suffer from some form of mental illness, such as depression or anxiety. However, that is not to say that without career satisfaction you cannot have a meaningful life. These days, many people do not have the luxury of being able to choose the career of their choice as they may not have had the opportunity to pursue it, due to lack of education or money. These people can still find meaning in other parts of their life, whether it be in raising their children and taking care of their family, or even pursuing their passions and hobbies outside of work hours. For example, someone may find the most meaning in their life by creating art, but may not be able to make a living by doing this and therefore have to get a job that may not bring them much satisfaction. In conclusion, there are several other aspects of people’s lives where meaning can be found, be it children, hobbies, or even religion. That is not to say that job satisfaction is not important, but rather just one possible source of happiness out of many.
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a sense of purpose and fulfillment, which are two of the key ingredients for true happiness. Those who find themselves stuck in boring, monotonous, and menial
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IELTS essay The most essential component of a person’s life is his or her time at the workplace, and life turns meaningless once no job satisfaction is obtained.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
354 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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