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The mass media including television radio and newspaper have great influence in shaping people ideas .To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary world, it is undoubtedly true that numerous individuals are being shaped there thought by influencing with the mass media. This essay agrees with this view that mass media play a pivotal role to build people's ideas. Firstly, it provide a news by their own way in media and secondly, it also arrange discussions on one view. To commence with, mass media has a great effect to make individuals ideas, as it gives a news into a modified form despite a real news. The predominant reason is that for getting a publicity in public, they make a simple news into attractive form by rendering one side argument, and in this way, mass media become able to put their own views in people's mind. In German, to illustrate, Hitler used the German media to spread the false news all over the world about atrocities on German residents in 2012. As a result, it is very convenient for Mass Media to produce their opinion in people's brain. Moreover, by arranging debate on one opinion, mass media give assistance to individuals for getting a clarity of news. To elaborate it, people could be capable to make perspectives about culture and politics, because it provide a thought of, a plethora of, individuals on one topic, and it become easy for people to make a right suggestion. In India, for example, tremendous of TV channels invite a many guests for the live interview to reveal their different ideas on controversial news Hence, this thing leads people to choose the correct side of news. However, in the era of modernization, mass media is not being put any influence to build people's opinion, owing to, people do not easily trust on any news without confirmation. To explicit it, many individuals have been trapped in a predicament situation, due to acquiring wrong news. In 2010, for instance, Government have to face a great financial loss, by virtue of, telecasting incorrect information about a surgical strike on India and China border. thus, for escaping from incorrect knowledge, people do not give preference to mass media. In conclusion, although mass media is unable to put effect on people, as they do not show their trust on it. yet, I think that it is influenced for molding individuals ideas, because it demonstrates information according to their prospects, and it also organise the debate to solving controversial issue.
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true that numerous
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individuals
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thought
by influencing with the
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mass
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media
. This essay
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agrees
with this view that
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mass
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media
play a pivotal role to build
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people's
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ideas
.
Firstly
, it
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provide
a
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news
by their
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own
way in
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media
and
secondly
, it
also
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arrange
discussions on one view. To commence with,
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mass
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media
has a great effect to
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make
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individuals
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ideas
, as it gives a
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news
into a modified form despite a real
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news
. The predominant reason is that for getting a publicity in public, they
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make
a simple
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news
into attractive form by rendering one side argument, and in this way,
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mass
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media
become able to put their
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own
views in
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people's
mind. In German, to illustrate, Hitler
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used
the German
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media
to spread the false
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news
all over the world about atrocities on German residents in 2012.
As a result
, it is
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very
convenient for
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Mass
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to produce their opinion in
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people's
brain.
Moreover
, by arranging debate on one opinion,
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mass
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media
give assistance to
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individuals
for getting a clarity of
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news
. To elaborate it,
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people
could be capable to
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make
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perspectives about
culture and politics,
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because
it
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provide
a
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thought
of, a plethora of,
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individuals
on one topic, and it
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become
easy for
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people
to
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make
a right suggestion. In India,
for example
, tremendous of TV channels invite a
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many
guests for the
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live
interview to reveal their
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different
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ideas
on controversial
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news
Hence
, this thing leads
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people
to choose the correct side of
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news
.
However
, in the era of modernization,
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mass
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media
is not
being put
any influence to build
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people's
opinion, owing to,
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people
do not
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trust on any
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news
without confirmation. To
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explicit it
,
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many
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individuals
have
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in a predicament situation, due to acquiring
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wrong
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news
. In 2010,
for instance
,
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Government
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have to
face a great financial loss, by virtue of, telecasting incorrect information about a surgical strike on India and China border.
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thus
, for escaping from incorrect knowledge,
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people
do not give preference to
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mass
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media
.
In conclusion
, although
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mass
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media
is unable to put effect on
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people
, as they do not
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show
their trust on it.
yet
, I
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think
that it
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for molding
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individuals
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ideas
,
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because
it demonstrates information according to their prospects, and it
also
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organise
the debate to solving controversial issue.
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IELTS essay The mass media including television radio and newspaper have great influence in shaping people ideas.

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  American English
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