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The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. Why is this? How could this be controlled?

The manufacturing and going by cars are so popular, but it negative effects on ecology and environment. The cause of it would be advantages of using car and popularing. The possible solution can be laws what can controll using vehicles and be encouraged going by bike or alternative kinds of transport. The first cause of increasing number of cars is advantages of going by car. Because, automobile is very usefull and helpfull in people’s life. For instance, it was reported in Forbes that 80% of people use their cars everyday for going to work, to do shopping and traveling. But significant number of cars are damaging ecology, so next problem is likely to be air polution. And a possible solution can be laws. Vehicles would be controlled by environment and using alternative ways of going by transport be recommended. The second cause is cars are very popular. They shows the status who you are. According to the statistics reported in 2019, 89% of Asian workers such as LG and Samsung workers buy new car every year for showing that they have money. Car are so popular that every city has a problem with traffic jum. A possible solution can be encouraging of riding bike. The government should do it possible everywhere and give money to children and students who use bike to go to school or university. Because money is good motivation to do it. If children start to use bike when they are small, they will continue it when they get older. The future is connected with younge individuals. In conclusion, the causes of why share of people use car are positive aspects of using car and popular of car. But possible solution are to do laws that controlled having cars and encouraging of using alternative transport. And may be in future all of people will use the part of better transport for ecology and environment.
The manufacturing and going by
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cause
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car
and
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popularing
. The
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solution
can be laws what can
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controll
using vehicles and
be encouraged
going by
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bike
or alternative kinds of transport.

The
first
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cause
of increasing number of
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cars
is advantages of going by
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car
.
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Because
, automobile is
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very
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usefull
and
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helpfull
in
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people’s
life.
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, it
was reported
in Forbes that 80% of
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people
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use
their
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cars
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everyday
for going to work, to
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do shopping
and traveling.
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significant number of
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cars
are damaging ecology,
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so
next
problem is likely to be air
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polution
. And a
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possible
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solution
can be laws. Vehicles would
be controlled
by environment and using alternative ways of going by transport
be recommended
.

The second
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cause
is
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cars
are
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very
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popular
. They
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shows
the status who you are. According to the statistics reported in 2019, 89% of Asian workers such as LG and Samsung workers
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buy
new
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car
every year for showing that they have money.
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are
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so
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popular
that every city has a problem with traffic
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. A
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possible
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solution
can be encouraging of riding
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bike
. The
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government
should do it
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possible
everywhere and give money to children and students who
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use
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bike
to go to school or university.
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Because
money is
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motivation to do it. If children
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to
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when they are
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older. The future
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individuals.

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, the
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causes
of why share of
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people
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use
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car
are
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positive
aspects of using
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car
and
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popular
of
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car
.
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But
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possible
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solution
are to do laws that controlled having
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cars
and encouraging of using alternative transport. And may be in future all of
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people
will
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use
the part of better transport for ecology and environment.
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IELTS essay The manufacturing and use of cars damages the environment but their popularity is increasing. Why is this? How could this be controlled?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
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