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The internet means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. Do you agree or disagree?

there is widely held view that you must not travel arround the world by offline and you can discover how people's life. Hovewer I do not subsciribe to the belief that online visiting is productive hobby. Firstly, you are not able to learn their mother tongue. Secondry, you do not find out their culture From my every day experience, in spite of the fact that you travel safely, you cannot make unforgettable days in your time. on tha top of that you are not able to research their language and it bringds more uncomfortable. especially you cannot make friend with them. For example, according to Uzbek Tourism given stasistic information roughly slightly more one in ten tourists made an efford to learn Uzbek language and they taught to other people who took a trip in the Uzbekiston in 2018 year. In the writer's view that If you have a stroll online you cannot discover their culture as well as their life. To put it another words, If you visist as a real viseter you will have experiment to have a chat with straight person. In addition, government make an arrangement for guests who stroll in their country than being online tourist. For example, according to Harvard University scientific approach about three quarter percent people prefed having a stroll by becoming real visiter that online. In conclusion, guestes can learn other languange and exchange ideas with oher people and you are able to find uot other culture and daily life
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there
is
widely
held view that you
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must
not travel
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arround
the world by
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offline and
you can discover how
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people
's life.
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Hovewer
I do not
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subsciribe
to the belief that online visiting is productive hobby.
Firstly
, you are not able to learn their mother tongue.
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Secondry
, you do not find out their culture

From my every day experience,
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in spite of
the fact that you travel
safely
, you cannot
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make
unforgettable days in your time.
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on
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tha
top of that you are not able to research their language and it
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bringds
more uncomfortable.
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especially
you cannot
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make
friend with them.
For example
, according to Uzbek Tourism
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given
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stasistic
information roughly
slightly
more one in ten tourists made an
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efford
to learn Uzbek
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language and
they taught to other
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people
who took
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a trip in
the
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Uzbekiston
in 2018 year.

In the writer's view that If you have a stroll online you cannot discover their culture
as well
as their life. To put it
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another words
, If you
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visist
as a real
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viseter
you will have experiment to have a chat with straight person.
In addition
,
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government
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make
an arrangement for guests who stroll in their country than being online tourist.
For example
, according to Harvard University scientific approach about
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three quarter
percent
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people
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prefed
having a stroll by becoming real
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visiter
that online.

In conclusion
,
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guestes
can learn other
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languange
and exchange
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ideas
with
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oher
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people and
you are able to find
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uot
other culture and daily life

IELTS essay The internet means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
248 words
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4.0
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