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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that never existed before what are the serious problems associated with computers and what solutions can you suggest?

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that never existed before what are the serious problems associated with computers and what solutions can you suggest? E3VeM
Internet is indispensable source of Information and it is a boon for mankind. These days people used internet for sharing information with others but this thing also create a negative issue that will never exist before. This essay will analyse the fact, reason and logic behind this problem and try to find out its possible solution. To comments by stating immutable aspects related detrimental effect of internal on human being. First and foremost, there are many problems associated with Internet such as hacking, scamming, pornography and many more. secondly, social networking sites makes people introvert which leads to they lived a sedentary lifestyle. Moreover, Anti Social elements on internet spreading Hoax messages and manipulate people which create panic and also leads to rumours and riots. Where there is a will, there is a way for mitigate this problem humans have to install security software in their devices, so no one can control their internet except them self. Government have to developt strict policies regarding guidelines of the internet and they also have to monitor the person who are spending habits amongst the people. Although, people have to not blindly believe on every detail on information and they have to cross check the information before coming to conclusion. In my final analysis I would like to firmly assert that internet is a magnificent source of information. However, it contains some flaws which we can readily eradicate by taking some deligent steps. Otherwise a day will come when we will have to repent on our own actions.
Internet is indispensable source of
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Information
and it is a boon for mankind. These days
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people
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used
internet for sharing
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information
with others
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this thing
also
create a
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negative
issue that will never exist
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. This essay will
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the fact, reason and logic behind this problem and try to find out its possible solution.

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First
and foremost, there are
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many
problems associated with Internet such as hacking, scamming, pornography and
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many
more.
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secondly
, social networking sites
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makes
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people
introvert which leads to they
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lived
a sedentary lifestyle.
Moreover
,
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Anti Social
elements on internet spreading Hoax messages and manipulate
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people
which create panic and
also
leads to
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rumours
and riots.

Where there is a will, there is a way for mitigate this problem humans
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have to
install security software in their devices,
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so
no one can control their internet except them self.
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Government
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have
to
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developt
strict policies regarding guidelines of the
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internet and
they
also
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have to
monitor the person who are spending habits amongst the
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people
. Although,
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people
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have to
not
blindly
believe on every detail on
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information and
they
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have to
cross
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check
the
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information
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before
coming to conclusion.

In my final analysis I would like to
firmly
assert that internet is a magnificent source of
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information
.
However
, it contains
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some
flaws which we can
readily
eradicate by taking
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some
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deligent
steps.
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Otherwise
a day will
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come
when we will
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have to
repent on our
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own
actions.
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IELTS essay The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that never existed before what are the serious problems associated with computers and what solutions can you suggest?

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  American English
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255 words
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