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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand , it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements.

The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. with these statements. QL8E3
It is a fact that internet technology has helped people in connecting with their relatives and friends without the boundaries of distance and cost, but many people think that globalization has made people less socialized and more individualistic. Thus, This essay will examine both sides of the argument before reaching a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, many people are indeed having social life problems these days, due to the existence of the this tool. Almost everybody has their mobile phone nowadays, and they can use it for browsing, chatting and online gaming. With all the attractive and entertaining applications, many people like to play around with their gadgets for hours and abandon their social days. As a result, it has been reported that many families are having communication problems these days due to they have less time for an eye to eye contact with other family members. However, it can be seen that the problem has arisen due to the improper and indiscipline act of users themselves. If it is used for the right purpose and the appropriate portion, it will bring many benefits for humanity. Firstly, internet technology has truly changed the way individuals and corporations interact and correspond. With automatic email and chatting facilities such as yahoo or google, people could communicate and connect with other people more efficiently and effectively. Secondly, the internet could also be used to expand people's networking. Social media sites such as Facebook or Twitter could be used to connect people from different areas, maintain friendships, and even it could be used for online businesses as well. Therefore, it depends on the users themselves on how wise they use it. In conclusion, although online technology has become a problem for some people's social life, others disagree about it. To a certain point, the essay does believe that the internet could be a treat to our social life, but if people use it wisely and appropriately, then this article does believe that it has many benefits for individuals and societies.
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helped
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in connecting with their relatives and friends without the boundaries of distance and cost,
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many
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people
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think
that globalization has made
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less socialized and more individualistic.
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, This essay will examine both sides of the argument
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before
reaching a reasonable conclusion.

On the one hand,
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many
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people
are
indeed
having
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social
life
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problems
these days, due to the existence of
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tool. Almost everybody has their mobile phone nowadays, and they can
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use
it for browsing, chatting and online gaming. With all the attractive and entertaining applications,
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many
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people
like to play around with their gadgets for hours and abandon their
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social
days.
As a result
, it has
been reported
that
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many
families are having communication
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problems
these days due to they have less time for an
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eye to eye
contact with other family members.

However
, it can be
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seen
that the
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has arisen due to the improper and indiscipline act of users themselves. If it is
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used
for the right purpose and the appropriate portion, it will bring
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many
benefits for humanity.
Firstly
, internet technology has
truly
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changed
the way individuals and corporations interact and correspond. With automatic email and chatting facilities such as yahoo or google,
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people
could communicate and connect with other
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more
efficiently
and
effectively
.
Secondly
, the internet could
also
be
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used
to expand
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people
's networking.
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media sites such as Facebook or Twitter could be
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used
to connect
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from
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different
areas, maintain friendships, and even it could be
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used
for online businesses
as well
.
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, it depends on the users themselves on how wise they
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use
it.

In conclusion
, although online technology has become a
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problem
for
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some
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people
's
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social
life, others disagree about it. To a certain point, the essay does believe that the internet could be a treat to our
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social
life,
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but
if
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people
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use
it
wisely
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, then this article does believe that it has
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many
benefits for individuals and societies.
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IELTS essay The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. with these statements.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
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