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The improvements in technology currently bring about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe having simpler lives is the only solution, I would argue that technological advances can help to tackle these environmental problems.

The improvements in technology currently bring about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe having simpler lives is the only solution, I would argue that technological advances can help to tackle these environmental problems. 2bKKx
The improvements in technology currently bring about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe having simpler lives is the only solution, I would argue that technological advances can help to tackle these environmental problems. On the one hand, it is believed that individuals need to live simple lives and rely less on technology. The first suggestion is that people should walk or cycle rather than driv cars. This is because the current number of cars being manufactured and used is increasing, which causes high levels of exhausted fumes and makes air pollution become serious. Additionally, people should try to reduce their consumption of electricity so that the exploitation of natural resources such as fossil fuels or nuclear power can be minimised. An example of this idea is the annual event called Earth Hour where everyone is asked to turn their lights off for sixty minutes. On the other hand, I believe the developments of technology can greatly contribute to environmental protection. Firstly, because of those improvements, people are able to come up with ways to recycle materials such as paper or glass, which reduces the problem of waste disposal. Secondly, technology can also help to create electricity using renewable resources. For example, many countries in the world have built plants that utilise solar energy to generate power. As a result, it is not necessary to rely on nonrenewable resources, and people can create electricity without significantly damaging the environment. In conclusion, while some people think that they should live simpler lives to prevent environmental issues, I would argue that these problems can be dealt with by technological improvements.
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believe having simpler
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solution, I would argue that technological advances can
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to tackle these environmental problems.

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is believed
that individuals need to
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live
simple
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lives
and rely less on
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technology
. The
first
suggestion is that
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people
should walk or cycle
rather
than
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driv
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because
the
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current
number of cars
being manufactured
and
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used
is increasing, which causes high levels of exhausted fumes and
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makes
air pollution become serious.
Additionally
,
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people
should try to
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reduce
their consumption of electricity
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so
that the exploitation of natural resources such as fossil fuels or nuclear power can be
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. An example of this
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is the annual
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On the other hand
, I believe the developments of
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can
greatly
contribute to environmental protection.
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of those improvements,
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people
are able to
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come
up with ways to recycle materials such as paper or glass, which
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reduces
the problem of waste disposal.
Secondly
,
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technology
can
also
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help
to create electricity using renewable resources.
For example
,
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many
countries in the world have built plants that
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utilise
solar energy to generate power.
As a result
, it is not necessary to rely on nonrenewable resources, and
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people
can create electricity without
significantly
damaging the environment.

In conclusion
, while
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think
that they should
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live
simpler
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lives
to
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prevent
environmental issues, I would argue that these problems can
be dealt
with by technological improvements.
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IELTS essay The improvements in technology currently bring about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe having simpler lives is the only solution, I would argue that technological advances can help to tackle these environmental problems.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
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