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The growing number of youth in a country- an advantage or a disadvantage?

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Globally it has been observed that the youth have been the pillars for leading any country to development and have proven to be useful for the betterment of a nation. However, not all share this opinion. Today I will be discussing the advantages and disadvantages of the same and present my opinion. A lion’s share of individuals around the world are young adults, their age ranging from 12 to 25 years. These individuals have greatly contributed to the financial flourishment of the country. Being young in age, they naturally have the physical capacity to perform strenuous tasks that would otherwise become difficult for a geriatric. They are energetic, curious and able to develop their own ambitions leading to their personal development, indirectly developing the society. They are flexible and easily accommodate to the belief systems prevalent around the globe. For example, it is easier for a youth to pursue a career in a different country as he/she can easily accept the belief systems and blend in with the native population. It also becomes easier for the youth to easily acquire a variety of skillsets. This makes it easier for them to acquire a job and make a living. The age-old orthodox beliefs are shunned by the young which allows room for change leading to development of the country and cross-cultural interaction. The young make it easy for people of various ethnicity to interact and blend in creating a socio-economical variety. However, not all share the same thought. Many are of the opinion that a growing number of youths in a society can be problematic. This can be explained due to mass-migrations, job sparsity and ultimately increased crime rates. Because of all the reasons listed above, I believe that an increase in young population will be beneficial to any country if an equally strong economy is made available.
Globally it has
been observed
that the
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youth
have been the pillars for leading any
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country
to development and have proven to be useful for the betterment of a nation.
However
, not all share this opinion.
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Today
I will be discussing the advantages and disadvantages of the same and present my opinion.

A lion’s share of individuals around the world are
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young
adults, their age ranging from 12 to 25 years. These individuals have
greatly
contributed to the financial
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flourishment
of the
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country
. Being
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young
in age, they
naturally
have the physical capacity to perform strenuous tasks that would
otherwise
become difficult for a geriatric.

They are energetic, curious and able to develop their
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own
ambitions leading to their personal development,
indirectly
developing the society. They are flexible and
easily
accommodate to the belief systems prevalent around the globe.
For example
, it is easier for a
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youth
to pursue a career in a
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different
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country
as he/she can
easily
accept the belief systems and blend in with the native population.

It
also
becomes easier for the
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youth
to
easily
acquire a variety of
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skillsets
. This
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makes
it easier for them to acquire a job and
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make
a living. The age-
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old
orthodox beliefs
are shunned
by the
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young
which
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allows
room for
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change
leading to development of the
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country
and cross-cultural interaction. The
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young
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
it easy for
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people
of various ethnicity to interact and blend in creating a
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socio-economical
variety.

However
, not all share the same
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thought
.
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Many
are of the opinion that a growing number of youths in a society can be problematic. This can be
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explained
due to mass-migrations, job sparsity and
ultimately
increased crime rates.

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Because
of all the reasons listed above, I believe that an increase in
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young
population will be beneficial to any
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country
if an
equally
strong economy
is made
available.
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IELTS essay The growing number of youth in a country- an advantage or a disadvantage?

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