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The graph examines data about the revenue generated, in billion pounds, by Southland's three primary export sectors (international tourism, dairy products and meat products) in the three years 2000, 2021 and 2025.

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IELTS essay The graph examines data about the revenue generated, in billion pounds, by Southland's three primary export sectors (international tourism, dairy products and meat products) in the three years 2000, 2021 and 2025.

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