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Farming is the backbone of every country but nowadays many youngsters hesitate to enter in this profession. Why is this the case and what can be done to avoid it?

Farming is a primeval profession that can change the fate of a country. Numerous businesses have direct and indirect interaction with the agriculture sector. Unfortunately, there are many reasons as to why the youth are lacking interest in adopting the agricultural sector, over which I would throw light with supportive references and solutions to curb this problem. Firstly, the increasing mindset of people to attain better standards of living is making the youngsters craving to get white color jobs with fat income. Every parent wishes that their children achieve a better quality of life by getting better education and finally a comfortable and satisfied employment. This scenario that’s been inculcated into the youth since their childhood makes them think that there is no comfortable life if they don’t study well. It can be witnessed that 90 % of youngsters in India either want to become an engineer or a doctor and if they don’t secure a place in any of these sectors they presume a poor career prospects. Such psychology needs to be eradicated from the mindset of the youngsters and their elders to explore potential career path. Secondly, last two decades have witnessed as to how industrial and communication revolution spread their wings into all walks of life. Due to the shortage of time, 70 % population are dependent on ready to eat foods, which indirectly encouraging the agriculture sector and at the same time gaining commercial value to the sector. Government organizations must make programs and propose financial aid to encourage youth in taking up farming as their prime work. Educational institutions play a pivotal role in marketing the importance of agriculture in adolescents, which would not only develop strong economy but also potential youth that would change the phase of the country in global village. In conclusion, youth of the nation must realize if no one opt the agriculture sector there will come a day where we would not have sufficient food derivatives. It becomes the elder’s responsibility to educate their children the importance of farming and make them learn the science, so as they can support themselves and support from organizations will also help in educating the common man about the importance of farming that would support the economy and change the fate of the country.
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Farming
is a primeval profession that can
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change
the fate of a country. Numerous businesses have direct and indirect interaction with the
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agriculture
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sector
. Unfortunately, there are
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many
reasons as to why the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
youth
are lacking interest in adopting the agricultural
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
, over which I would throw light with supportive references and solutions to curb this problem.

Firstly
, the increasing mindset of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to attain better standards of living is making the youngsters craving to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
white color jobs with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fat
income. Every parent wishes that their children achieve a better quality of life by getting better education and
finally
a comfortable and satisfied employment. This scenario that’s
been inculcated
into the
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youth
since their childhood
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them
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think
that there is no comfortable life if they don’t study well. It can
be witnessed
that 90 % of youngsters in India either want to become an engineer or a doctor and if they don’t secure a place in any of these
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sectors
they presume a poor career prospects. Such psychology needs to
be eradicated
from the mindset of the youngsters and their elders to explore potential career path.

Secondly
, last two decades have witnessed as to how industrial and communication revolution spread their wings into all walks of life. Due to the shortage of time, 70 % population are dependent on ready to eat foods, which
indirectly
encouraging the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
agriculture
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
and at the same time gaining commercial value to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
.
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Government
organizations
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must
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make
programs and propose financial aid to encourage
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youth
in taking up
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farming
as their prime work. Educational institutions play a pivotal role in marketing the importance of
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agriculture
in adolescents, which would not
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only
develop strong economy
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but
also
potential
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youth
that would
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change
the phase of the country in global village.

In conclusion
,
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youth
of the nation
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must
realize if no one opt the
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agriculture
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sector
there will
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come
a
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day where
we would not have sufficient food derivatives. It becomes the elder’s responsibility to educate their children the importance of
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farming
and
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make
them learn the science,
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so
as they can support themselves and support from organizations will
also
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help
in educating the common
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man
about the importance of
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farming
that would support the economy and
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change
the fate of the country.
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IELTS essay Farming is the backbone of every country but nowadays many youngsters hesitate to enter in this profession. Why is this the case and what can be done to avoid it?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
380 words
6.0
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