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the gap between children and their parents

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Parents are the ones who give us advice and support for each of us, however, sometimes we encounter conflicts with our own parents, especially in adolescence. For me, I also have conflicts with my parents such as about dress, working hours, eating habits. . . this conflict occurs due to differences in generation and age. My parents always wanted me to wear light, serious clothes; they want me to get up at 6 a. m. and go to bed at 10: 30 p. m. ; When it comes to food, they want me to eat food prepared by the elderly, healthy food. Contrary to all that, I like loose-fitting clothes that match my personality; I usually go to bed at 1am and get up at 7am; I like restaurant food, and fast food. My parents have reminded and advised me many times, I personally also realize that what I do is unscientific and may affect my health, so I am gradually changing every day
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always wanted me to wear light, serious clothes; they want me to
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up at 6 a. m. and go to bed at 10: 30 p. m.
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prepared by the elderly, healthy
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. Contrary to all that, I like loose-fitting clothes that match my personality; I
usually
go to bed at 1am and
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up at 7am; I like restaurant
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. My
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have reminded and advised me
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IELTS essay the gap between children and their parents

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
163 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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