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The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country."The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangero

The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country. " The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangero Jo3M5
The topic was about recommending Appian Roadways to construct roads for new shopping malls because of their commitment to quality and the constructions are long-lasting, overall they hiring new quality control manager and purchased the new paving machine. The following argument is based on unwarranted assumptions and flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the author argued that Route 40 roadway was long-lasting than Route 101 because Appine roadways construct it and also conclude that the Appine construction is better. The author assumed that the conditions were analogous in two parts, it might be possible that because of the environment and heavy vehicle load the Route 101 badly cracked. On the other hand, even though Route 40 was constructed 4 years ago, due to less vehicle load the road was still in good conditions. The author claimed that Appine construction continuing commitment to quality and they purchased cutting edge machines. The author does not compare other construction companies with Appine and never demonstrated the other works rather than Route 40. It might be possible that there are many companies better than Appine construction and also have new technologies and better workers. It might be possible that because of using new technologies the cost of Appine construction also higher. At last the author claimed that Appine access road does not need to be repaired for four years and also recommended on constructing new roads for shopping malls. The author made this assumption only on single work of Appine construction. The author also assumed those good roads also be a reason for the success of shopping malls. It might be possible that in spite of good roads the location of the shopping mall is in a remote place and since the other than Route 40, other works of Appine does not study they might fail to provide sufficient quality to the construction. The end of the argument, because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, the author fails to make a convincing case which can prove that Appine construction is better than others and also made the authors' argument more sound.
The topic was about recommending
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Appian
Roadways to construct
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roads
for
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new
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shopping
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malls
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because
of their commitment to
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quality
and the
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constructions
are long-lasting,
overall
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they hiring
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new
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quality
control manager and
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purchased
the
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new
paving machine. The following
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argument
is based
on unwarranted assumptions and flawed for numerous reasons.

Primarily
, the
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author
argued that
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Route
40 roadway was
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long-lasting
than
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Route
101
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because
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Appine
roadways construct it and
also
conclude that the
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Appine
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construction
is
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better
. The
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author
assumed that the conditions were analogous in two parts, it
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might
be
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possible
that
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because
of the environment and heavy vehicle load the
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Route
101
badly
cracked. On the
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other
hand,
even though
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Route
40
was constructed
4 years ago, due to less vehicle load the
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road
was
still
in
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good
conditions.

The
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author
claimed that
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Appine
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construction
continuing commitment to
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quality and
they
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purchased
cutting edge machines. The
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author
does not compare
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other
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construction
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companies
with
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Appine
and never demonstrated the
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other
works
rather
than
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Route
40. It
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might
be
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possible
that there are
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many
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companies
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better
than
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Appine
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construction
and
also
have
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new
technologies and
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better
workers. It
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might
be
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possible
that
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because
of using
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new
technologies the cost of
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Appine
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construction
also
higher.

At last the
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author
claimed that
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Appine
access
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road
does not need to
be repaired
for four years and
also
recommended on constructing
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new
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roads
for
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shopping
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malls
. The
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author
made this assumption
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only
on single work of
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Appine
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construction
. The
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author
also
assumed those
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good
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roads
also
be a reason for the success of
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shopping
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malls
. It
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might
be
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possible
that
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in spite of
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good
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roads
the location of the
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shopping
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mall
is in a remote place and since the
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other
than
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Route
40,
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other
works of
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Appine
does not study they
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might
fail to provide sufficient
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quality
to the construction.

The
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of the
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,
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because
the
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argument
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makes
several unwarranted assumptions, the
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author
fails to
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make
a convincing case which can prove that
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Appine
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construction
is
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better
than others and
also
made the authors'
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argument
more sound.
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IELTS essay The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country. " The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangero

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