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The first man to walk on the moon claimed it was a step forward for mankind. However, it has made little difference in most people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Since that time, when human took a step to out of our think. That day, when three scientists went the first time on the moon as well as ours of thinking style has changed. Yet, some could not have understood, they seem like, it is simple things, and never would be happened in our lives. Every person knew that about that day, occurred by human has understood that their thought to can pull beyond. It's of positive effect happened in children, therefore, they want to be same, moreover, want to something big and something different. Whereas, parents like to do. Nowadays more than people would become part of new events also new hot blood. For example, success heroes of stories and that equipment to display with vast masses will get inspiration. On the other hand, Other are deeming, it is time waste, as same those had done. But, moreover, they are giving wrong information to younger stars, and doing changing way. However, it will not run for a long time, as far as, they watch motivations of those who have changed the world and created a history. Along with, teen and kids are leaving to negative people and being joining in new history. It step will take to forward. To conclude, humankind to got a moral from bolds. Father and mother should need to raise their son forwards new innovation as well as should not leave with negatives souls.
Since that
time
, when human took a step to out of our
think
. That day, when three scientists went the
first
time
on the moon
as well
as ours of thinking style has
changed
.
Yet
,
some
could not have understood, they seem like, it is simple things, and never would
be happened
in our
lives
. Every person knew that about that day, occurred by human has understood that their
thought
to can pull beyond. It's of
positive
effect happened in children,
therefore
, they want to be same,
moreover
, want to something
big
and something
different
.
Whereas
, parents like to do. Nowadays more than
people
would become part of
new
events
also
new
hot blood.
For example
, success heroes of stories and that equipment to display with vast masses will
get
inspiration.
On the other hand
, Other are deeming, it is
time
waste, as same those had done.
But
,
moreover
, they are giving
wrong
information to younger stars, and doing changing way.
However
, it will not run for a long
time
, as far as, they
watch
motivations of those who have
changed
the world and created a history. Along with, teen and kids are leaving to
negative
people
and being joining in
new
history. It
step
will take
to
forward.
To conclude
, humankind to
got
a moral from bolds. Father and mother should need to raise their son forwards
new
innovation
as well
as should not
leave
with negatives souls.
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IELTS essay The first man to walk on the moon claimed it was a step forward for mankind. However, it has made little difference in most people’s lives.

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  American English
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