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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Car which is an amazing blessing of technology offers tremendous facilities that's why more and more people exhibit inclination towards using a car and also having a branded car is a sign of aristocracy. Due to random use of car creates multiple problems which may be detrimental in the foreseeable future. I personally opine that Government should impose some laws and legislations for ownership and using cars to avoid serious health issues and to reduce the frequencies of accidents. Explicitly, use of a car as a means of transport holds a lot of affirmative uplift but it's impact on general public health can't be neglected. Firstly, the emission of carbon gases from vehicles is proved harmful for human body as well as other animals and plants also, thus nowadays plants can't grow properly due to lack of nutrients and eventually our green land turns to dessert day by day. Moreover, the smell of gas outpours from a car is unbearable for people and for this they can't breath properly. Secondly, lacking of exercise due to having a car leads to obesity and most of people in urban areas suffer from longer lasting diseases that can't be curable. A recent survey of a town in china shows there is a surge of asthma patients about 20% each year due to air pollution with carbon gas from vehicle and the environmentalist predicts that the amount would be doubled in the next year if there is no restriction of car use before it's too late. Undoubtedly, advantages of using cars increase it's popularity among youngsters and they compel their parents to buy brand new car to cope up with trend and fashion. As a consequence, lots of road accidents occur due to ignorance and lack of driving skills which take valuable life of passer-by as well as youngsters. Moreover, lack of laws permits uneducated people to drive the cars, even they have not any driving license. To avoid accidents Governments should impose strict laws and raise awareness among public and make them realize it's severe consequences. For example, Most of the people nowadays have been died every day due to road accidents than any severe diseases. To reiterate, it can be concluded from the aforementioned paragraphs that it is imperative to formulate effective laws and regulation against spontaneous use of car by the Government and evaluate all necessary documents properly before issuing a license. Only in this way we can avoid health related problems and able to save the valuable lieves of others.
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Car
which is an amazing blessing of technology offers tremendous facilities that's why more and more
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people
exhibit inclination towards using a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
and
also
having a branded
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car
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sign
of aristocracy.
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Due
to random
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
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car
creates multiple problems which may be detrimental in the foreseeable future. I
personally
opine that
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Government
should impose
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some
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laws
and
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legislations
for ownership and using
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cars
to avoid serious health issues and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the frequencies of accidents.

Explicitly
,
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use
of a
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car
as a means of transport holds
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a lot of
affirmative uplift
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but
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it's
impact on
Consider using "public".
general public
health
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can't
be neglected
.
Firstly
, the emission of carbon gases from vehicles
is proved
harmful for human body
as well
as other animals and plants
also
,
thus
nowadays plants
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can't
grow
properly
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due
to lack of nutrients and
eventually
our green land turns to dessert day by day.
Moreover
, the smell of gas
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outpours
from a
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car
is unbearable for
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people
and for this they
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can't
Did you mean the verb "breathe"? 'breath' is a noun.
breath
properly
.
Secondly
, lacking of exercise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to having a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
leads to obesity and most of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
in urban areas suffer from longer lasting diseases that
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can't
be curable. A recent survey of a town in
Capitalize this word if you mean the country, not white porcelain.
china
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shows
there is a surge of asthma patients about 20% each year
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to air pollution with carbon gas from vehicle and the environmentalist predicts that the amount would
be doubled
in the
next
year if there is no restriction of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
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it's
too late.

Undoubtedly
, advantages of using
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cars
increase
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it's
popularity among
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
youngsters and
they compel their parents to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".
brand new
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car
to cope up with trend and fashion. As a consequence, lots of road accidents occur
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to ignorance and lack of driving
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
which take valuable life of passer-by
as well
as youngsters.
Moreover
, lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
permits uneducated
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to drive the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
, even they have not any driving license. To avoid accidents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Governments
should impose strict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
and raise awareness among public and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them realize
Did you mean "its severe consequences"?
it's severe consequences
.
For example
, Most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
nowadays have been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
died
every day
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
due
to road accidents than any severe diseases.

To reiterate, it can
be concluded
from the aforementioned paragraphs that it is imperative to formulate effective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laws
and regulation against spontaneous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
and evaluate all necessary documents
properly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
issuing a license.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Only
in this way we can avoid health related problems and able to save the valuable
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lieves
of others.
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.

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420 words
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