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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. MJDk
Undoubtedly, vehicles on roads has emerged tremendously from two decades. There are different views towards introduction of different modes of transportation and rules to cope with increasing cars and its presence on road. However, I believe that there should be strict laws and rules to curb the increasing numbers of cars and its substitute. To begin with, increasing Green House effect is the major issue faced by contemporary world. Despite several technological advancement and rules, emission of harmful gases from the motor vehicles has not declined resulting major air pollution to the environment. For instance, cars running on fuel emits carbon dioxide results climate change by trapping heat in the environment. In solution this, it is a extreme requirement of alternative commuting such as introduction of electric vehicle or cars running on different renewable source which do not have adverse effects of the atmosphere. Secondly, restriction of owning cars will help to reduce traffic. Global laws should be implemented to limit the purchase and use of personal vehicle. Despite decline in automobile sector, there will be incline in the uses of public transport. Taxes paid by the owner cannot fulfill the damages to the air pollution caused by emission of harmful gasses. To exemplify, Delhi government has introduced Odd and even method to tackle the issue of polluted air and rapidly increasing traffic. This has reduced the dependency of personal cars uses. To sum up, introduction of ecofriendly fuel and restricting use of private cars should be implanted to tackle excessive crowding of vehicles on road.
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on roads has emerged
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from two decades. There are
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different
views towards introduction of
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different
modes of transportation and
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rules
to cope with
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increasing
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cars
and its presence on road.
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, I believe that there should be strict laws and
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rules
to curb the
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increasing
numbers of
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cars
and its substitute.

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begin
with,
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increasing
Green
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effect is the major issue faced by contemporary world. Despite several technological advancement and
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rules
, emission of harmful gases from the motor
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vehicles
has not declined resulting major air pollution to the environment.
For instance
,
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cars
running on fuel emits carbon dioxide results climate
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change
by trapping heat in the environment. In solution this, it is
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a
extreme requirement of alternative commuting such as introduction of electric
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vehicle
or
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cars
running on
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different
renewable source which do not have adverse effects of the atmosphere.

Secondly
, restriction of owning
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cars
will
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help
to
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reduce
traffic. Global laws should
be implemented
to limit the
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purchase
and
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use
of personal
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vehicle
. Despite decline in automobile sector, there will be
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incline
in the
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uses
of public transport. Taxes paid by the owner cannot fulfill the damages to the air pollution caused by emission of harmful gasses. To exemplify, Delhi
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government
has introduced Odd and even method to tackle the issue of polluted air and
rapidly
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increasing
traffic. This has
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reduced
the dependency of personal
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cars
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uses
.

To sum up, introduction of
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ecofriendly
fuel and restricting
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use
of private
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cars
should
be implanted
to tackle excessive crowding of
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vehicles
on road.
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IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use.

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