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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. v.8

The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. v. 8
All countries in the world are suffering from environmental crisis, which is exacerbating each year. In my view, individual effort is less significant in reducing such damages; hence, the government and private organisations should come forward to tackle this ever-increasing global warming and environmental degradation issues. Certainly, environmental damage is an intricate issue which primarily results from careless industrialisation. Factories release chemicals into the environment without any treatment. So, they are liable for such devastating environment degradation and they should pay all the money to reinstate the environment. According to the World Economic Forum’s survey, industrial wastes are the key reason for the contemporary ecological collapse and it comprises 70% of the world’s pollutions. Moreover, pollution is not an issue for a single country, but it is creating havoc in all countries. As all countries are inextricably connected, no country can deny its duties to resolve the issue. While the iceberg in Antarctica melts, it increases the risks of floods in the lower sea-level countries like Bangladesh, Sri Lanka and the Maldives. Whereas 80% of global warming is happening due to the excessive fuel usages of the developed countries. Rich countries should reduce their fuel consumption to limit the global temperature rise so that other countries become free from any environment-related jeopardies. In conclusion, the intensity of the environmental damages has reached its peak, so the individual effort will not greatly impact on the reduction of this worldwide issue. In fact, large organizations and government should resolve the issue because they are responsible for most the damages and they have the means to control it.
All
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countries
in the world are suffering from
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environmental
crisis, which is exacerbating each year. In my view, individual effort is less significant in reducing such damages;
hence
, the
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government
and private
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organisations
should
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come
forward to tackle this ever-increasing global warming and
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environmental
degradation issues.

Certainly
,
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environmental
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damage
is an intricate
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issue
which
primarily
results from careless
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industrialisation
. Factories release chemicals into the environment without any treatment.
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So
, they are liable for such devastating environment
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degradation and
they should pay all the money to reinstate the environment. According to the World Economic Forum’s survey, industrial wastes are the key reason for the contemporary ecological collapse and it comprises 70% of the world’s pollutions.

Moreover
, pollution is not an
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issue
for a single
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country
,
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but
it is creating havoc in all
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countries
. As all
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countries
are
inextricably
connected, no
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country
can deny its duties to resolve the
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issue
. While the iceberg in Antarctica melts, it increases the
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risks
of floods in the lower sea-level
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countries
like Bangladesh, Sri Lanka and the Maldives.
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Whereas
80% of global warming is happening due to the excessive fuel usages of the developed
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countries
. Rich
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countries
should
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reduce
their fuel consumption to limit the global temperature rise
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so
that other
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countries
become free from any environment-related
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jeopardies
.

In conclusion
, the intensity of the
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environmental
damages has reached its peak,
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so
the individual effort will not
greatly
impact on the reduction of this worldwide
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issue
. In fact, large
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organizations
and
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government
should resolve the
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issue
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because
they are responsible for most the
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damages and
they have the means to control it.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. v. 8

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  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
5.5
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