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Fossil fuel, such as coal, oil and natural gas, is extensively used in many countries which cause harms to the environment. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, however, is being encouraged in many countries. Is this a positive or negative development? v.4

Fossil fuel, such as coal, oil and natural gas, is extensively used in many countries which cause harms to the environment. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, however, is being encouraged in many countries. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 4
The demand for fuels is rapidly increasing in many countries with the population rise. It is also associated with the industrialisation and it seems only obvious that oil, coal and natural gas rich countries would largely use them to take the leverage of their stock of such energy sources. For instance, Russia has natural gas, China and India are rich in coal and the USA and OPEC countries has a huge stockpile of oil. Besides, other developed countries that do not have a huge stock of such fuel, import them from other countries at a considerably cheap rate. However, the stock of fossil fuel is limited and would get exhausted at a certain point. So, alternative and green sources, which is renewable, would be the main source of our energy in the future and we should get ready for the time when we will have no new oil or gas stock. Since green energy like wind and solar energy are renewable, their use should be as much encouraged as possible from right now and it is a good thing that the trend has already started. Alternative sources of power, such as solar and wind power, do not pollute the environment, have lower carbon emission and are eco-friendly. So their use could save the planet from a disaster of global warming which is already visible around us. Wind power and solar power are in use in countries like Denmark, Germany and France and more and more countries are joining the list. We already have an extremely efficient technology to produce solar and wind power and the trend is quite encouraging. The demand for energy is increasing at a fast pace and the stock of fossil fuel is diminishing. So we should turn to alternative green energy sources and share the technology and expertise with all nations so that the transition happens all around the world to save our otherwise dying planet due to climate change and greenhouse effects.
The demand for
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fuels
is
rapidly
increasing in
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many
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countries
with the population rise. It is
also
associated with the
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industrialisation
and it seems
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only
obvious that oil, coal and natural gas rich
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countries
would
largely
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use
them to take the leverage of their stock of such
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energy
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sources
.
For instance
, Russia has natural gas, China and India are rich in coal and the USA and OPEC
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countries
has a huge stockpile of oil.
Besides
, other developed
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countries
that do not have a huge stock of such
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fuel
, import them from other
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countries
at a
considerably
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cheap
rate.
However
, the stock of fossil
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fuel
is limited
and would
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get
exhausted at a certain point.
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So
, alternative and green
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sources
, which is renewable, would be the main
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source
of our
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energy
in the
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future and
we should
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get
ready for the time when we will have no new oil or gas stock. Since green
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energy
like
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wind
and
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solar
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energy
are renewable, their
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use
should be as much encouraged as possible from right
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now
and it is a
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good
thing that the trend has already
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started
.

Alternative
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sources
of
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power
, such as
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solar
and
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wind
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power
, do not pollute the environment, have lower carbon emission and are eco-friendly.
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So
their
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use
could save the planet from a disaster of global warming which is already visible around us.
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Wind
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power
and
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solar
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power
are in
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use
in
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countries
like Denmark, Germany and France and more and more
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countries
are joining the list. We already have an
extremely
efficient technology to produce
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solar
and
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wind
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power
and the trend is quite encouraging.

The demand for
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energy
is increasing at a
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fast
pace and the stock of fossil
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fuel
is diminishing.
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So
we should turn to alternative green
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energy
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sources
and share the technology and expertise with all nations
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so
that the transition happens all around the world to save our
otherwise
dying planet due to climate
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change
and greenhouse effects.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Fossil fuel, such as coal, oil and natural gas, is extensively used in many countries which cause harms to the environment. The use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, however, is being encouraged in many countries. Is this a positive or negative development? v. 4

Essay
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3 paragraphs
327 words
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