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The developments in technology allow more and more machines to be used rather than human employees. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

The developments in technology allow more and more machines to be used rather than human employees. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages. 5rYV
In this modern era, highest growth in computing or electronics permits high usages of tools as comparison to manpower. I strongly consider that usage of electronic appliances has more disadvantages then human employees which I will delve in looming paragraphs. More uses of machinery has more chances of failures. To begin with, machines are not reliable as comparison to manforce as it can be failed at any point. To elaborate, we commonly see that while working in construction sites a number of time machines damaged such as concrete machines consequently human are always there in failure of machines. Furthermore, machines like computers need some specific softwares which help them to work if these applications delete then the computer can not work and in this situation these machinery will only recognise as an empty box. Top of all, machines require time to time servicing without operation we can not work properly. To exemplify, if we want to work on computer then we need updated Windows and features like window Xp but these things never happened with manpower. However, physical work has plethora of advantages then machines. Firstly, manpower 's experience is long lasting means it will work in even 60 years age bt machines can not work in long time. For instance, cell phones and laptops hardly work for few years. Secondly, manpower can work day and night even they can do over time which equipments can not. After some time machines need charging which workers do not need. Likewise, we see numerous time in emergency to complete the projects worker works for 24hrs whi h machines can not do. To conclude, I firmly believe that in comparison to machines manforce has much pros as they are reliable as well as perform long lasting then electronics devices.
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then
human employees which I will delve in looming paragraphs. More
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of machinery has more chances of failures. To
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with,
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machines
are not reliable as comparison to
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manforce
as it can
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commonly
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that while working in construction sites a number of
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time
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damaged such as concrete
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consequently
human are always there in failure of
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machines
.
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,
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like computers
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need
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softwares
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if these applications delete then the computer can not
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and in this situation
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these machinery
will
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as an empty box. Top of all,
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machines
require
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to
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servicing without operation we can not
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work
properly
. To exemplify, if we want to
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work
on computer then we
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need
updated Windows and features like window
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these things never happened with manpower.
However
, physical
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has plethora of advantages then
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machines
.
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, manpower 's experience is
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long lasting
means it will
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in even 60 years age
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bt
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can not
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in long
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, cell phones and laptops hardly
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for few years.
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, manpower can
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day and night even they can do over
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which equipments can not.
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charging which workers do not
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.
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numerous
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in emergency to complete the projects worker works for 24hrs
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whi
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can not do.
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, I
firmly
believe that
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to
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manforce
has
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much
pros as they are reliable
as well
as perform
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long lasting
then electronics devices.
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IELTS essay The developments in technology allow more and more machines to be used rather than human employees. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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