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The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society? 7arjy
Wrong habits attract more, even one know the harmful effects of bad habit on their physical and mental well-being. In recent decades, Smoking has been gaining a false popularity among people because of various reasons. However, the solution to stop people from smoking it not an impossible task to do. In this essay I introduce some of solutions and reasons that the government and society can take into the account to reduce the number of smokers. To begin with, on from the main roots of this issue are influence of movies and peer pressure among youngsters and stress-full lifestyle. Nowadays smoking is symbolized as a power in tv, and movies and youngsters are easily influenced by this. To illustrate it more, countries, such as the USA and Australia, many studies ensured that more than 50% of youngsters are start smoking because their idol actor was smoking in movies. In addition to that, we cannot deny the fact of stress or performance pressure one can get on their workplace. As a result, to unwind themselves they are taking support of cigarette and tobacco. To cope up with this situation, firstly, Government can introduce wellness centres, seminars, and campaign to aware people about the related serious health issues. To unwind employees from hectic lifestyle, companies can arrange fun activities and weekend trips. In addition to that, famous people can set an example as a non-smoker person. For instance, Axay kumar, a famous Indian celebrity, encourage youngsters to stop smoking by producing advertisement and supporting campaign. Not only this, but even parents can also teach their children what is wrong and what is right. To conclude, there are various reasons are available that can influence or attract people to smoke. However, with the help of governments, parents, movies, and NGOs we can reduce the numbers of smokers up to greater extent.
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habit on their physical and mental well-being. In recent decades,
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Smoking
has been gaining a false popularity among
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people
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of various reasons.
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people
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it not an impossible task to do. In this essay I introduce
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some of solutions
and reasons that the
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government
and society can take into the account to
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reduce
the number of smokers.

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movies
and peer pressure among youngsters and
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stress
-full lifestyle. Nowadays
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smoking
is symbolized
as a power in
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tv
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and youngsters are
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studies ensured that more than 50% of youngsters are
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smoking
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because
their idol actor was
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smoking
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.
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to that, we cannot deny the fact of
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or performance pressure one can
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on their workplace.
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To cope up with this situation,
firstly
,
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Government
can introduce wellness
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centres
, seminars, and campaign to aware
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people
about the related serious health issues. To unwind employees from hectic lifestyle,
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companies
can arrange fun activities and weekend trips.
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can set an example as a non-smoker person.
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by producing advertisement and supporting campaign. Not
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this,
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and what is right.

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, there are various reasons are available that can influence or attract
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to smoke.
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, with the
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governments
, parents,
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, and NGOs we can
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reduce
the numbers of smokers up to greater extent.
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IELTS essay The dangers of smoking are well known, yet many people continue with this habit. What are the causes of this? How can we reduce smoking in society?

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308 words
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