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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. NNXW
A popular belief is that the number of crimes is dropping nowadays due to the modern technologies that are easier to solve crimes. However, I agree to a limited degree with this opinion and believe that improved technologies can also increase the rate of crimes. On the one hand, there is a fall in the number of crimes, and the particular reason for this is advanced computers and devices. Firstly, cameras today are founded everywhere because they are important for the cops to know the faces of the criminals. Besides, cameras will aid to prevent a terrible incident to happen. For example, the security who sits in the camera room will comprehend that the man who is covering his face with a black mask has an awful intend, thus, the security will take a step to catch him before the man does what is he welling for. However, years ago cameras were not invented, as a result, people used to suffer from detecting the killers and they were depending the witnesses which were doubtful. Secondly, advanced computers can locate the criminal’s situation. When a crime is committed the police office will look after the killers’ car number and the computer will discover where are they exactly. Consequently, modern computers helped in solving crimes faster than before. On the other hand, developed technologies helped in rising the number of crimes in the world. In other words, with the modern device criminals can hack the victims’ personal information such as bank account and steal their money without trying to sneak to their houses. To illustrate, a recent survey conducted by JJ Magazine has showed that 10 million dollars were stolen from the American citizens in 2018, and this was done by an unknown criminal with the usage of CSC device. In conclusion, it is generally claimed that the rate of crimes is declining because of the advanced technologies such as cameras and computers. Nevertheless, I believe that technologies have negative and positive impact on crimes in this current time.
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number
of
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crimes
is dropping nowadays due to the modern
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technologies
that are easier to solve
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crimes
.
However
, I
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agree
to a limited degree with this opinion and believe that
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improved
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technologies
can
also
increase the rate of crimes.

On the one hand, there is a fall in the
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number
of
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crimes
, and the particular reason for this
is advanced
computers and devices.
Firstly
,
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cameras
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today
are founded
everywhere
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because
they are
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important
for the cops to know the faces of the
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criminals
.
Besides
,
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cameras
will aid to
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prevent
a terrible incident to happen.
For example
, the security who sits in the
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camera
room will comprehend that the
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man
who is covering his face with a black mask has an awful
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intend
,
thus
, the security will take a step to catch him
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before
the
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man
does what
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is
he welling for.
However
, years ago
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cameras
were not invented,
as a result
,
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people
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used
to suffer from detecting the
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killers and
they
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were depending
the witnesses which were doubtful.
Secondly
, advanced computers can locate the
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criminal’s
situation. When a
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crime
is committed
the police office will look after the killers’ car
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number
and the computer will discover where are they exactly.
Consequently
, modern computers
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helped
in solving
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crimes
faster than
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before
.

On the other hand
, developed
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technologies
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helped
in rising the
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number
of
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crimes
in the world.
In other words
, with the modern device
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criminals
can hack the victims’ personal information such as bank account and steal their money without trying to sneak to their
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houses
. To illustrate, a recent survey conducted by
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JJ
Magazine has
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showed
that 10 million dollars
were stolen
from the American citizens in 2018, and this
was done
by an unknown
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criminal
with the usage of CSC device.

In conclusion
, it is
generally
claimed that the rate of
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crimes
is declining
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because
of the advanced
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technologies
such as
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cameras
and computers.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
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technologies
have
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negative
and
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positive
impact on
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crimes
in this
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current
time.
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IELTS essay The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
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