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The costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries? You should write at least 250 words. v.1

The costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries? v. 1
Now a day, international air fares have declined tremendously resulting in increased tourist traffic in many countries. This essay will discuss how tourism can help countries to enhance their revenues and will also discuss how increased tourist activities can result in deterioration of key natural sites as the primary disadvantage. To begin with, tourism has become a major catalyst of economic activity for many developing nations around the world. Countries which do not have an abundance of natural resources can make use of the natural sites and scenery to diversify their revenue base. For example, Thailand has been able attract an ever increasing number tourists each year to its beautiful lush green beaches. Besides this, another added advantage of tourism is that the government can use the income earned from such activities on building essential infrastructure like railroads, schools and hospitals, thus, improving living conditions for its residents. However, one key disadvantage emanating from increasing tourism is the harm caused by visitors to the natural environment. For instance, very recently it was reported on the African Herald that two gorillas belonging to a group of rare species, died in South Africa’s Wildlife Safari after eating poisonous food that was given to them by one of the visitors. Littering is another major problem. Enhanced levels of littering on beaches have caused the water to become polluted, consequently, impacting sea plants and animals. To conclude, though, tourism is absolutely essential to the world economy and has far reaching positive economic consequences for developing countries, but at the same time the negative aspects associated with tourism such as its harmful effect on the natural habitat cannot be disregarded.
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a day, international air fares have declined
tremendously
resulting in increased tourist traffic in
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many
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countries
. This essay will discuss how
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tourism
can
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help
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countries
to enhance their revenues and will
also
discuss how increased tourist activities can result in deterioration of key
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natural
sites as the primary disadvantage.

To
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begin
with,
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tourism
has become a major catalyst of economic activity for
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many
developing nations around the world.
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Countries
which do not have an abundance of
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natural
resources can
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make
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use
of the
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natural
sites and scenery to diversify their revenue base.
For example
, Thailand has been
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able attract
an
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ever increasing
number tourists each year to its
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beautiful
lush green beaches.
Besides
this, another
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added
advantage of
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tourism
is that the
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government
can
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use
the income earned from such activities on building essential infrastructure like railroads, schools and hospitals,
thus
, improving living conditions for its residents.

However
, one key disadvantage emanating from increasing
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tourism
is the harm caused by visitors to the
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natural
environment.
For instance
,
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very
recently it
was reported
on the African Herald that two gorillas belonging to a group of rare species,
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died
in South Africa’s Wildlife Safari after eating poisonous food that was
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given
to them by one of the visitors. Littering is another major problem. Enhanced levels of littering on beaches have caused the water to become polluted,
consequently
, impacting sea plants and animals.

To conclude
, though,
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tourism
is
absolutely
essential to the world economy and has
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far reaching
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positive
economic consequences for developing
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countries
,
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but
at the same time the
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negative
aspects associated with
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tourism
such as its harmful effect on the
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natural
habitat cannot
be disregarded
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay The costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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