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The continued rise in the world population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

The continued rise in the world population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity? j6bp
The spontaneous increase in the number of people globally is considered as one of the biggest challenges of society at this current period. This essay will discuss the possible cause of this inevitable growing statistics and my opinion. Nowadays, the unceasing rise on global population is the reason behind the many difficulties we are currently facing. These problems affect not only an individual but also the whole world. Primarily, over population can lead us to face the problem with the demand and supply of our basic needs. Commonly, the priority needs of people such as food, clothing, shelter, and water cannot be accessed or attain due to inadequate supply of this goods. Also, education and jobs opportunities become insufficient. Thus, leaving many people poor. This is evidenced by a crowded country such as India, wherein many people live in a small box like houses and does not have any means to make a decent living. Generally, the usual root of overpopulation is poverty. The lack of educational resources for people and lack of knowledge in family planning produces huge booms in population. Additionally, as higher illiteracy rate becomes rampant it contributes to unwanted pregnancies leading to higher birth rates. However, in my opinion our greatest difficulty is poverty rather than overpopulation which is among its accompanying problem and the solution is to provide an access to education. In my view, if people are more educated people will have an increase awareness of themselves as well as their conditions and they can make an essential logical decision including how to start a family or even at giving birth. Furthermore, if education will be accessed by a large scope of people, there will be many more proactive in engaging themselves in finding solutions to existing problems such as this issue. To conclude, the greatest problem faced by society today is poverty and increasing population is just one of its products together with conflicts, destruction of peace, environmental degradation, and the scarcity of goods available.
The spontaneous increase in the number of
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people
globally
is considered
as one of the biggest challenges of society at this
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current
period. This essay will discuss the possible cause of this inevitable growing statistics and my opinion.

Nowadays, the unceasing rise on global
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population
is the reason behind the
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many
difficulties we are
currently
facing. These
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problems
affect not
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only
an individual
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but
also
the whole world.
Primarily
, over
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population
can lead us to face the
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problem
with the demand and supply of our basic needs.
Commonly
, the priority needs of
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people
such as food, clothing, shelter, and water cannot
be accessed
or attain due to inadequate supply of
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this
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goods
.
Also
, education and jobs opportunities become insufficient.
Thus
, leaving
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many
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people
poor. This
is evidenced
by a crowded country such as India, wherein
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many
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people
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live
in a
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small
box like
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houses
and does not have any means to
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make
a decent living.

Generally
, the usual root of overpopulation is poverty. The lack of educational resources for
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people
and lack of knowledge in family planning produces huge booms in
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population
.
Additionally
, as higher illiteracy rate becomes rampant it contributes to unwanted pregnancies leading to higher birth rates.

However
, in my opinion our greatest difficulty is poverty
rather
than overpopulation which is among its accompanying
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problem
and the solution is to provide
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an access
to education. In my view, if
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people
are more educated
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people
will have an increase awareness of themselves
as well
as their
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conditions and
they can
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make
an essential logical decision including how to
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start
a family or even at giving birth.
Furthermore
, if education will
be accessed
by a large scope of
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people
, there will be
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many
more proactive in engaging themselves in finding solutions to existing
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problems
such as this issue.

To conclude
, the greatest
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problem
faced by society
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today
is poverty and increasing
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population
is
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just
one of its products together with conflicts, destruction of peace, environmental degradation, and the scarcity of
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goods
available.
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IELTS essay The continued rise in the world population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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