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The contemporary world suffers from different kind of distractions namely drug and alcohol obsession, increasing delinquency and addiction to Internet. Nevertheless, there exists one type of addiction that has deeply ingrained in the human mentality, it is gambling. what is the effect of it on families ? Discuss personal views and give opinion.

The contemporary world suffers from different kind of distractions namely drug and alcohol obsession, increasing delinquency and addiction to Internet. Nevertheless, there exists one type of addiction that has deeply ingrained in the human mentality, it is gambling. what is the effect of it on families? Discuss personal views and give opinion. RNGDM
Distractions are always part and parcel of any societies although the means of it can be changed from time to time. Some would argue that, despite there are many major obsessions and addictions these days namely drugs, alcohol, internet; gambling is the major one. According to my personal view, I strongly agree with the idea of proponents as this particular bad habit can cause bankruptcy and bitter relationship within families. To begin with, it is often observed that gambling is associated with high stakes and that can continue to put financial burdens on some family. To elaborate, a family man needs to manage different monetary aspects inside a family so that everyone can live healthily and happily. However, when someone is addicted to gambling inside of a family, then he or she often forgets their responsibilities towards their households and start to bet money. On top of that, more addicted he or she gets, often it is observed that betting amount will also increase and sometimes they may end up to drain all of their saving and even selling houses. Additionally, that shatters the family relationships as well. A house usually can be called as well mannered only if the relationship among the family members are healthy and compassionate, but doing gambling destroys that. According to a recent study conducted by The Oxford University last year, while playing cards, almost 79% are also associated with heavy drinking and these are usually not considered to be as ingredients for a healthy living. Furthermore, for some cases gambling may even end up in domestic violence also. For example, last year in my neighbourhood, fourteen people were booked under the same reason and they were professionals gamblers too. To conclude, there are many addictions and obsessions. but gambling is what affecting the family lives most. I would suggest, that the government should pass strict laws to reduce gambling and impose hefty fines on those who are playing it illegally.
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changed
from time to time.
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would argue that, despite there are
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many
major obsessions and addictions these days
namely
drugs, alcohol, internet;
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gambling
is the major one. According to my personal view, I
strongly
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agree
with the
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idea
of proponents as this particular
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bad
habit can cause bankruptcy and bitter relationship within families.

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begin
with, it is
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often
observed that
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gambling
is associated
with high stakes and that can continue to put financial burdens on
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some
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family
. To elaborate, a
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family
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man
needs to manage
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different
monetary aspects inside a
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family
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so
that everyone can
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live
healthily
and
happily
.
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, when someone
is addicted
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gambling
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inside of
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family
, then he or she
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forgets their responsibilities towards their households and
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start
to bet money.
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it
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they may
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end
up to drain all of their saving and even selling
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houses
.
Additionally
, that shatters the
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family
relationships
as well
.

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usually
can
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well mannered
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if the relationship among the
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members are healthy and compassionate,
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doing
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gambling
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destroys
that. According to a recent study conducted by The Oxford University last year, while playing cards, almost 79% are
also
associated with heavy drinking and these are
usually
not considered to be as ingredients for a healthy living.
Furthermore
, for
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some
cases
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gambling
may even
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end
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For example
, last year in my
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, fourteen
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people
were booked
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reason and
they were professionals gamblers too.

To conclude
, there are
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many
addictions and obsessions.
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but
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gambling
is what affecting the
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family
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lives
most. I would suggest, that the
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government
should pass strict laws to
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reduce
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gambling
and impose hefty fines on those who are playing it
illegally
.
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IELTS essay The contemporary world suffers from different kind of distractions namely drug and alcohol obsession, increasing delinquency and addiction to Internet. Nevertheless, there exists one type of addiction that has deeply ingrained in the human mentality, it is gambling. what is the effect of it on families? Discuss personal views and give opinion.

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