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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. v.2

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.
GRAPHICS in THIS TEST SHOW us THE TOP TEN COUNTRIES WITH THE HIGHEST ALLOCATE ON TRAVEL IN 2014. THE display of EXPENDITURE IS BASED ON THE CALCULATION OF US $Billion. COUNTRIES calculation CONTAINS CHINA, the UNITED STATES, GERMANY, the UNITED KINGDOM, SINGAPORE, SOUTH KOREA, HONG KONG, INDIA, MALAYSIA, TAIWAN. GRAPH IS USED MULTIPLE OF 20 SCALES WHICH STARTS FROM 0 TO 120. THE GRAPH SHOWED WITH A HORIZONTAL DISPLAY WHICH IS ACCOMPANIED by THE SEPARATOR LINE IN THE SCALE WITH VALUE 4. THIS GRAPH WAS RELATED TO THE SOURCE FROM UNWTO COUNTRIES WITH THE HIGHEST COSTUMER CONSUME ON TRAVEL 2014 FALL INTO CHINA. The number one COUNTRY WITH CONCENTRATE 110 US $Billion. Next RATED ACCORDED TO THE UNITED STATES AND GERMANY WITH 85 US $Billion, and also followed by the UNITED KINGDOM WITH 55 US $Billion, SOUTH KOREA AND HONG KONG WITH 20 US $Billion, INDIA WITH 15 US $Billion, then MALAYSIA WITH 12 US $Billion. The LAST RATED in graphic showed by the country of TAIWAN WITH 10 US $Billion consumed. COMPARISON OF DONATE USER ON TRAVEL CHINA WITH TAIWAN CONTAINED 100 US $Billion. As the graph show the USER EXPEND ON CHINA IS 11 TIMES LARGER THAN TAIWAN. THERE ARE 2 STATE COUNTRIES THAT HAVE THE EQUATION OF SPENDING COSTUMERS each other. Some COUNTRIES IN ASIA was telling us to CONTINUE and DOMINATE the ALLOCATE USER COMPARED TO OTHER continents. THE CHINA COUNTRY BECOMES THE BIGGEST SPENDING USER IN 2014. CHINA NEIGHBOURING COUNTRIES, HONG KONG AND TAIWAN ARE INCLUDED IN LIST. THAT ALSO RELATED TO NUMBER OF POPULATIONS WHERE THERE ARE POTENTIALS FOR VERY BIG TRAVELS.
GRAPHICS in THIS
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us THE TOP TEN
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COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST ALLOCATE ON
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TRAVEL
IN 2014. THE display of EXPENDITURE
IS BASED
ON THE CALCULATION OF US
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$Billion
.
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COUNTRIES
calculation CONTAINS CHINA, the
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UNITED STATES
, GERMANY, the
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UNITED KINGDOM
, SINGAPORE, SOUTH KOREA, HONG KONG, INDIA, MALAYSIA, TAIWAN.
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GRAPH
IS
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USED
MULTIPLE OF 20 SCALES WHICH
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STARTS
FROM 0 TO 120. THE
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GRAPH
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SHOWED
WITH A HORIZONTAL DISPLAY WHICH
IS ACCOMPANIED
by THE SEPARATOR LINE IN THE SCALE WITH VALUE 4. THIS
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GRAPH
WAS RELATED
TO THE SOURCE FROM
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UNWTO


COUNTRIES WITH THE HIGHEST COSTUMER CONSUME ON
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TRAVEL
2014 FALL INTO CHINA. The number one
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COUNTRY
WITH CONCENTRATE 110 US
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.
Next
RATED ACCORDED TO THE
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UNITED STATES
AND GERMANY WITH 85 US
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, and
also
followed by the
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UNITED KINGDOM
WITH 55 US
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, SOUTH KOREA AND HONG KONG WITH 20 US
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, INDIA WITH 15 US
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, then MALAYSIA WITH 12 US
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$Billion
. The LAST RATED in graphic
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showed
by the
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country
of TAIWAN WITH 10 US
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consumed. COMPARISON OF DONATE
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USER
ON
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TRAVEL
CHINA WITH TAIWAN CONTAINED 100 US
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.
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As
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the
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EXPEND ON CHINA IS 11 TIMES LARGER THAN TAIWAN. THERE ARE 2 STATE
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COUNTRIES
THAT HAVE THE EQUATION OF SPENDING COSTUMERS each other.
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Some
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COUNTRIES
IN ASIA
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was
telling us to CONTINUE and DOMINATE the ALLOCATE
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USER
COMPARED TO OTHER continents.

THE CHINA
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COUNTRY
BECOMES THE BIGGEST SPENDING
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IN 2014. CHINA
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NEIGHBOURING
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COUNTRIES
, HONG KONG AND TAIWAN
ARE INCLUDED
IN LIST. THAT
ALSO
RELATED TO NUMBER OF POPULATIONS WHERE THERE ARE POTENTIALS FOR
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BIG
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TRAVELS
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3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
268 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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