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The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. v.2

The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.
Instead of considering the very old ethics of life, such as honour, kindness and trust as the real worth of a human, a school of thought, claims people's social dignity and materialistic things as worth. This essay completely disagrees with the fact because, real respect and honour comes from good deeds rather, from all the glitters that a man earns during his whole life and the materialistic things are just temporary but a man's kindness and greatness are always remembered. Since, the ages, a large part of the civilization always keeps themselves busy in earning things which they think that will earn a value for them in the eyes of society. Despite of knowing the fact that this is a kind of illusion because they are not going to stay for ever and will be lost in the storm of time. History has witnessed many similar instances, such as- The father of India-Mr. M. K Gandhi. Despite of hailing from a rich family, he decided to serve for the humanity and for his nation. It was because of his efforts and ideas only that led India towards her freedom from British rule and that is why he is remembered till today. Now, one fact that can never be neglected that it's the tendency of humans to opt that road only which serves his motives or eases him and his belongings lives all together. It is normally very difficult for a person to focus himself towards the social causes and issues. No one wants to emphasize such issues, but there are few who are completely different from others. It's not because they do not have anything to do or they intentionally do that. It's only because their intent to help others which they might carried from their ancestors. For example, Mr. Ratan Tata- The chairman of Tata Group. This organisation is one of the biggest and most successful organisations of the world. He runs many NGOs who are relentlessly working for the betterment of the society. Knowing the fact that he is one of the richest persons of the world, he is very down to earth and is always ready to help in any condition. In the light of the above facts, it is clear that materialistic things can earn only an illusion, but the real respect comes from the deeds, kindness, humbleness of a person.
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ethics of life, such as
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, kindness and trust as the real worth of a human, a school of
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thought
, claims
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people
's social dignity and materialistic things as worth. This essay completely disagrees with the
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fact
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because
, real respect and
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honour
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comes
from
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good
deeds
rather
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man
earns during his whole life and the materialistic things are
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just
temporary
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but
a
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's kindness and greatness are always remembered.

Since, the ages, a large part of the civilization always
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keeps
themselves busy in earning things which they
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think
that will earn a value for them in the eyes of society.
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Despite of
knowing the
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fact
that this is a kind of illusion
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because
they are not going to stay for ever and will
be lost
in the storm of time. History has witnessed
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many
similar instances, such as- The father of India-Mr. M. K Gandhi.
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Despite of
hailing from a rich family, he decided to serve for the humanity and for his nation. It was
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because
of his efforts and
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ideas
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only
that led India towards her freedom from British
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rule
and
that is
why he
is remembered
till
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today
.

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Now
, one
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fact
that can never
be neglected
that it's the tendency of humans to opt that road
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only
which serves his motives or
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eases
him and his belongings
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lives
all together. It is
normally
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very
difficult for a person to focus himself towards the social causes and issues. No one wants to emphasize such issues,
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but
there are few who are completely
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different
from others. It's not
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because
they do not have anything to
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do or
they
intentionally
do that. It's
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only
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because
their intent to
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help
others which they might
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carried
from their ancestors.
For example
, Mr.
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Ratan
Tata- The chairman of Tata Group. This
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organisation
is one of the biggest and most successful
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organisations
of the world. He runs
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many
NGOs who are
relentlessly
working for the betterment of the society. Knowing the
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fact
that he is one of the richest persons of the world, he is
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very
down to earth and is always ready to
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help
in any condition.

In the light of the above facts, it is
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clear
that materialistic things can earn
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only
an illusion,
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but
the real respect
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comes
from the deeds, kindness, humbleness of a person.
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IELTS essay The chart below shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010.

Essay
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4 paragraphs
395 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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