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The chart below shows the changes that took places in three areas of crime in Newport City from 2003 to 2012. v.1

The chart below shows the changes that took places in three areas of crime in Newport City from 2003 to 2012. v. 1
In recent years, many societies around the world are beginning to enjoy the glad tidings in the field of technology which has made life very easy. I strongly believe that these advancements are not all beneficial to mankind. On the one hand, the ability to solve problems with the use of computers had increased human life span. The argument to support this is the fact that, doctors are able to perform more sophisticated surgeries, such as brain, heart and spinal procedures, with better outcomes than in the past with the help of modern instruments. Consequently, patients are able to live longer to enjoy the rest of their lives. On the other hand, improvements in science come with its own setbacks. Firstly, this had resulted in increase in cyber crimes. This is because criminals do not need to leave their comfort zone to steal with guns, but they can withdraw money with the use of several programming applications. Thereby, causing more social problems. In addition, newly improved gadgets are affecting our ability to socialize with other people. That is, one can retrieve any information anywhere with the help of WorldwWideWeb without being there physically. This had reduced the act of letter writing and the need to interact with other members of the community. For instance, a recent study by the sociology department of Queen's university revealed that the number of informal gatherings (picnics, family get together) is gradually eroding from our routines with more breakthroughs in the area of communications. Thus, there is no doubt that we are losing grasp of the essence of interpersonal relationships. In conclusion, although the world is getting better with these new discoveries, but the negative impact it is having us as humans are enormous.
In recent years,
many
societies around the world are beginning to enjoy the glad tidings in the field of technology which has made life
very
easy. I
strongly
believe that these advancements are not all beneficial to mankind.

On the one hand, the ability to solve problems with the
use
of computers had increased human life span. The argument to support this is the fact that, doctors are able to perform more sophisticated surgeries, such as brain, heart and spinal procedures, with better outcomes than in the past with the
help
of modern instruments.
Consequently
, patients are able to
live
longer to enjoy the rest of their
lives
.

On the other hand
, improvements in science
come
with its
own
setbacks.
Firstly
, this had resulted in increase in cyber crimes. This is
because
criminals do not need to
leave
their comfort zone to steal with guns,
but
they can withdraw money with the
use
of several programming applications. Thereby, causing more social problems.
In addition
,
newly
improved
gadgets are affecting our ability to socialize with other
people
.
That is
, one can retrieve any information anywhere with the
help
of
WorldwWideWeb
without being there
physically
. This had
reduced
the act of letter writing and the need to interact with other members of the community.
For instance
, a recent study by the sociology department of Queen's university revealed that the number of informal gatherings (picnics, family
get
together) is
gradually
eroding from our routines with more breakthroughs in the area of communications.
Thus
, there is no doubt that we are losing grasp of the essence of interpersonal relationships.

In conclusion
, although the world is getting better with these new discoveries,
but
the
negative
impact it is having us as humans are enormous.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The chart below shows the changes that took places in three areas of crime in Newport City from 2003 to 2012. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
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