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The benefits of housework

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In the modern life, many parents believe that they should get their children involved in doing housework. From my point of view, I agree with the idea as it is significantly beneficial to children. Firstly, being required to do household tasks enables kids to be duty conscious. By doing chores like cleaning house or drying clothes not only can help children know that every family member has an important role to play in their home, but they are also provided with a sense of responsibility, which is vitally necessary for their personal development. Secondly, children who usually involve in doing household chores will be better prepared than those who do not. Life skills gained from doing housework helps kids know how to take good care of themselves, balance their life and solve problems more quickly and easily. It is crucial for their future, as everyone has to grow up after all, they can not keep depending on others forever. Moreover, doing the the tasks brings children closer to their family and shares the burdens with their parents. In fact, doing chores can actually creat special moments between children and adults. Kids may take pride in what they do, and so can their parents. In general, parents should support and guide their children to do housework as soon as possible.
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IELTS essay The benefits of housework

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
219 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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