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The graph illustrates the reason behind choosing one type of transport over another by the public on four different countries. The number of car owners in Canada is the highest among car choosers by 90% most of them said they have no other choice whereas in Netherland is lowest with 47%, on the other hand Netherland is first on people preferring bicycle by 26% and Belgium and Germany are tied on 2% meanwhile Germany leads in transportation by 18% and Belgium succeed it by 12% while Netherland is last but the least by 8% and Canada is the lowest by 3%. Furthermore, Netherland leads those who selected to go on foot by around 18% Belgium and Germany again tied their preferences on foot by 11%. On others all have equal preferences of 1% except for Belgium had 3%. Overall, the main reason for the majority of the Canadian preferring car is due to luck alternatives, meanwhile bicycle is dominated by Netherland and public transport by Germanies and Others by Belgium.
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