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The bar chart presents information about the number of travel to and from school are made by children with a grup of ages 5 to 12 years old in one country in 1990 and 2010.

The bar chart presents information about the number of travel to and from school are made by children with a grup of ages 5 to 12 years old in one country in 1990 and 2010. Doj9m
The bar chart presents information about the number of travel to and from school are made by children with a grup of ages 5 to 12 years old in one country in 1990 and 2010. Generally, in the first year of period the most of elementry school student reaching to their school's by walked and also while back to their home whereas a fewer children who traveled by car in this year. However, the trend was changed significantly in the next two decades, most of them traveled using a car in that period. Following this data, in 1990, the most of children with ages by 5 to 12 years old walked to their schools and came back to their homes accounted more than 12 million trips per year. While elementry students who took a bus accounted for more than 8 million trips per year. Following this, children who walked and took a bus made only 3 million trips as well as cycling, but slightly different. In the last position, a fewer children who traveled by their own car accounted slightly more than 4 million trips. On the contrary, in 2010, the pre-teen who using a car passanger increased drastically by reaching the highest number by nearly 12 million trips. While pre-teen who walk to and back from their school decreased sharply by twofold, it accounted for 6 millions. The clear altered on the other forms of transportation such as by bus, walk and bus, and cycling were accounted 5 million, 3 million, and 2 million trips respectively.
The bar chart presents information about the number of travel to and from
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school
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by
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children
with a
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grup
of ages 5 to 12 years
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old
in one country in 1990 and 2010.

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, in the
first
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year
of period the most of
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elementry
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school
student reaching to their school's by walked and
also
while back to their home whereas a fewer
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children
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who
traveled by
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car
in this
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year
.
However
, the trend was
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changed
significantly
in the
next
two decades, most of them traveled using a
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car
in that period.

Following this data, in 1990, the most of
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children
with ages by 5 to 12 years
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old
walked to their
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schools
and came back to their homes
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accounted
more than 12
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million
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trips
per
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year
. While
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elementry
students
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who
took a bus
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accounted
for more than 8
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million
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trips
per
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year
. Following this,
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children
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who
walked and took a bus made
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only
3
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million
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trips
as well
as cycling,
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but
slightly
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different
. In the last position, a fewer
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children
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who
traveled by their
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own
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slightly
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pre-teen
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using a
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passanger
increased
drastically
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nearly
12
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million
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trips
. While
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pre-teen
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who
walk to and back from their
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school
decreased
sharply
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accounted
for 6
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millions
. The
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clear
altered on the other forms of transportation such as by bus, walk and bus, and cycling were
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5
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, 3
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, and 2
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million
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trips
respectively
.
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IELTS essay The bar chart presents information about the number of travel to and from school are made by children with a grup of ages 5 to 12 years old in one country in 1990 and 2010.

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4 paragraphs
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