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The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Recently, health issues have become the main concern for many nations. Some are of the belief that the world will suffer from a numerous of health problems in the future. I strongly disagree with this opinion because new inventations and techonolgy advancements are being introdcued everyday. I will explain this further In this following lines and provide my personal opinion. Firstly, due to technology breakthorugh, people live longer than it was in the past. To put in other way, the live expectancy has been increased significantly especially in prosperpus nations. This is mainly becuase of substantail health care services provided to these societies. That was proved by a study conducted in 2019 by a group of scholars at Harvad school in 2019. The scholars found that improvements in the halth care sector led to a healthy society in the United states. This why governments give more attention to healthcare sector. Secondly, the quality of living has been risen in most of the countries. This includes good housing, educational and insfrastructure systems. If people live in not suitable accomdation, they will high likely to get health problems from lack of proper heating our dust. Futhermore, more bicycles lanes will motivate people to exercise which is benefical for their wellbeing. In conclusion, having mentioned the above. It can be said that people are expected to live better healthy life because of the advancements in both science and technonloy. However, international authorities should cooperate together to enhance this more.
Recently,
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health
issues have become the main concern for
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many
nations.
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Some
are of the belief that the world will suffer from a
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numerous
of
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health
problems in the future. I
strongly
disagree with this opinion
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because
new
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inventations
and
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techonolgy
advancements are being
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introdcued
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everyday
. I will
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explain
this
further
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Firstly
, due to technology
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breakthorugh
,
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people
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live
longer than it was in the past. To put in other way, the
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live
expectancy has
been increased
significantly
especially
in
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prosperpus
nations. This is
mainly
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becuase
of
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substantail
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health
care services provided to these societies. That
was proved
by a study conducted in 2019 by a group of scholars at
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Harvad
school in 2019. The scholars found that improvements in the
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halth
care sector led to a healthy society in the
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United states
. This why
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governments
give more attention to healthcare sector.

Secondly
, the quality of living has
been risen
in most of the countries. This includes
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good
housing, educational and
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insfrastructure
systems. If
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people
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live
in not suitable
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accomdation
, they
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will high
likely to
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get
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health
problems from lack of proper heating our dust.
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Futhermore
, more bicycles lanes will motivate
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people
to exercise which is
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benefical
for their wellbeing.

In conclusion
, having mentioned the above. It can
be said
that
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people
are
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expected
to
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live
better healthy life
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because
of the advancements in both science and
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technonloy
.
However
, international authorities should cooperate together to enhance this more.
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IELTS essay The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. with this statement

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
246 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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