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In this modern era, a weird pattern of unevenly divided wealth has been observed.

In this modern era, a weird pattern of unevenly divided wealth has been observed. NB6N
In this modern era, a weird pattern of unevenly divided wealth has been observed. Wealthier people have greater opportunities to earn even better while the less fortunate ones are facing a deteriorating situation. This essay will elucidate the issues associated with this unfavourable situation and the possible solutions to narrow the financial rift. To embark upon, more money is associated with a higher crime rate. The reason being, rich people use the money to turn situations in their favour. Bribes are, indeed, used to get the job done. For instance, a famous movie "No one killed Jessika" shows how money can be used to save criminals. Moreover, this gap in wealth is making the living situation for poor people even worse. Because the poor people barely have enough money to fill the jobs forms, these jobs are being acquired by people who already have a good income source. For instance, according to a survey 80 per cent of the children from poor families drop out of the schools. Hence, this situation is giving rise to greater problems that need immediate attention. Furthermore, the issues associated with unevenly distributed wealth needs immediate attention. Some possible solutions can be implying more taxes on the rich class. In addition, more taxes will contribute to the country's economy; meanwhile, contribute to reducing the wealth of people little by little. To state an example, these humans will buy an Audi car irrespective of the higher tax. Albeit, the problem can be further solved by providing more benefits to the poor class. This will help them to improve their financial condition while giving them better living standards. To illustrate, the government must introduce schemes such as free education, food items at lower rates etc. Thus, providing them with better benefits will help to bridge the gap. In conclusion, this essay elaborated on the problems associate with the financial gap between the rich and the poor simultaneously suggested some solutions to address the issue.
In this modern era, a weird pattern of
unevenly
divided
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wealth
has
been observed
. Wealthier
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people
have greater opportunities to earn even better while the less fortunate ones are facing a deteriorating
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situation
. This essay will elucidate the issues associated with this
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unfavourable
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situation
and the possible solutions to narrow the financial rift.

To embark upon, more
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money
is associated
with a higher crime rate. The reason being, rich
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people
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use
the
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money
to turn
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situations
in their
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favour
. Bribes are,
indeed
,
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used
to
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get
the job done.
For instance
, a
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famous
movie
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"
No one killed
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Jessika
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"
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shows
how
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money
can be
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used
to save criminals.
Moreover
, this gap in
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wealth
is making the living
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situation
for
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poor
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people
even worse.
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Because
the
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poor
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people
barely
have
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enough
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money
to fill the jobs forms, these jobs are
being acquired
by
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people
who already have a
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good
income source.
For instance
, according to a survey 80 per cent of the children from
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poor
families drop out of the schools.
Hence
, this
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situation
is giving rise to greater problems that need immediate attention.

Furthermore
, the issues associated with
unevenly
distributed
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wealth
needs immediate attention.
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Some
possible solutions can be implying more taxes on the rich
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class
.
In addition
, more taxes will contribute to the country's economy; meanwhile, contribute to reducing the
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wealth
of
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people
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little
by
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little
. To state an example, these humans will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
an Audi car irrespective of the higher tax. Albeit, the problem can be
further
solved by providing more benefits to the
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poor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
. This will
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help
them to
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improve
their financial condition while giving them better living standards. To illustrate, the
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government
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must
introduce schemes such as free education, food items at lower rates etc.
Thus
, providing them with better benefits will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to bridge the gap.

In conclusion
, this essay elaborated on the problems associate with the financial gap between the rich and the
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poor
simultaneously
suggested
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some
solutions to address the issue.

IELTS essay In this modern era, a weird pattern of unevenly divided wealth has been observed.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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