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The article states that Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse.

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The article states that Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. The Greeks defended themselves by burning mirror. The reading provides three reasons of support. However, the professor explains that the reasons are unconvincing and refutes each one of the author's reasons. First, the reading posits that the ancient Greeks were not technologically advanced enough to make such a device. And they needed a large sheet of cooper to set ships on fire. The professor refutes this opinion by stating that they used not just a single a mirror, but a dozens of them to form a big burning mirror. Second, the article claims that the burning mirror would have taken a long time to set the ships on fire according to an experiment. However, the professor contends that Roman boats were not build just by wood. Another material was used in their boats which was very easy to catch fire. This material could catch fire in seconds. Third, the reading avers that there were other ways to setting the ships on fire. The lecture opposes this point by saying that Romans were familiar with flaming arrows and they could defend themselves. While they could not see mirror in the battlefield.
The article states that Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse. The Greeks defended themselves by burning mirror.
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reading provides three reasons of support.
However
, the professor
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explains
that the reasons are unconvincing and refutes each one of the author's reasons.

First
, the reading posits that the ancient Greeks were not
technologically
advanced
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enough
to
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make
such a device. And they needed a large sheet of cooper to set ships on
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fire
. The professor refutes this opinion by stating that they
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used
not
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just
a single a mirror,
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but
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a dozens
of them to form a
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big
burning mirror.

Second, the article claims that the burning mirror would have taken a long time to set the ships on
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fire
according to an experiment.
However
, the professor contends that Roman boats were not
Consider using a past participle here: "built".
build
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just
by wood. Another material was
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used
in their boats which was
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very
easy to catch
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fire
. This material could catch
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fire
in seconds.

Third, the reading avers that there were other ways to setting the ships on
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fire
. The lecture opposes this point by saying that Romans were familiar with flaming
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
arrows and
they could defend themselves.
“While” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
While
they could not
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see
mirror in the battlefield.
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IELTS essay The article states that Roman navy attacked the Greek port city of Syracuse.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
203 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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