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The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee."We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female educa

The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee. " We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female educa Nr3gN
This passage claims that keeping the Grove college all-female will improve morale among students and inspire alumni to keep financially support relying on survey between student and alumni. This reasoning has several flaw and, therefore, is not convincing. The logic of the argument is compromised, because the author fails to mention some important information, uses incorrect analogy in the passage, suggests groundless cause-effect reasoning. First of all, the author claims that keeping the college all-female, therefore, will improve morale among students. When making such a statement, the author assumes that moral can form and support by absent of men. Indeed the author’s argumentation can seem logical at first glance. However, the author fails to consider that moral it is not only about women and men, unmoral, in author’s opinion, situation can happen and between two women. Therefore, the author’s argument is doubtful because it has several flaw in reasoning. If the author had provided more relevant information, his argument would have been more convincing. Second, the argument points out that eighty percent of the students responding to a survey conducted wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumni who answered a survey opposed co-education. Again, this point may seem reasonable and justified to inattentive reader. Nevertheless, a careful analysis reveals a major weakness in the author’s argument. The author relies on unrepresentative statistic. This problem could have been avoided if the author had mention that how many people exactly took part in surveys and their answers in percentage. Finally, the author suggests that keeping the college all-female will convince alumni to keep supporting. However, it may be the case that supporting of alumni depends om many other factors, for example economic situation in country and world. But the author totally ignores to consider such a scenario in the passage. This problem could have been avoided if the author had provided comprehensive analysis of all fact and factors relevant to the matter. In conclusion, the argument contains several logical inconsistencies: relying on a potentially unrepresentative statistical sample, drawing a questionable analogy, omission of important facts. The author’s reasoning, therefore, is doubtful and hardly convincing.
This passage claims that keeping the Grove college all-female will
improve
morale
among
students
and inspire alumni to
keep
financially
support relying on
survey
between
student
and alumni. This reasoning has
several flaw
and,
therefore
, is not convincing. The logic of the
argument
is compromised
,
because
the
author
fails to mention
some
important
information,
uses
incorrect analogy in the passage, suggests groundless cause-effect reasoning.

First of all
, the
author
claims that keeping the college all-female,
therefore
, will
improve
morale
among
students
. When making such a statement, the
author
assumes that
moral
can form and support by absent of
men
.
Indeed
the
author’s
argumentation can seem logical at
first
glance.

However
, the
author
fails to consider that
moral
it is not
only
about women and
men
, unmoral, in
author’s
opinion, situation can happen and between two women.
Therefore
, the
author’s
argument
is doubtful
because
it has
several flaw
in reasoning. If the
author
had provided more relevant information, his
argument
would have been more convincing.

Second, the
argument
points out that eighty percent of the
students
responding to a
survey
conducted wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumni who answered a
survey
opposed co-education. Again, this point may seem reasonable and justified to inattentive reader.
Nevertheless
, a careful analysis reveals a major weakness in the
author’s
argument
. The
author
relies on unrepresentative statistic. This problem could have
been avoided
if the
author
had mention that how
many
people
exactly
took part
in
surveys
and their answers in percentage.

Finally
, the
author
suggests that keeping the college all-female will convince alumni to
keep
supporting.
However
, it may be the case that supporting of alumni
depends
om
many
other factors,
for example
economic situation in country and world.
But
the
author
totally
ignores
to consider such a scenario in the passage. This problem could have
been avoided
if the
author
had provided comprehensive analysis of all fact and factors relevant to the matter.

In conclusion
, the
argument
contains several logical inconsistencies: relying on a
potentially
unrepresentative statistical sample, drawing a questionable analogy, omission of
important
facts. The
author’s
reasoning,
therefore
, is doubtful and hardly convincing.
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IELTS essay The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee. " We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female educa

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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