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Tell us your story. What unique opportunities or challenges have you experienced throughout your high school career?

Tell us your story. What unique opportunities or challenges have you experienced throughout your high school career? 7PkPb
Perfect, perfection, perfectionists. Were the words I’d describe my family, or so others thought. But in all honesty, I’d say they’re a series of contradicting words. I myself wasn’t an exception. Growing up in a family with high expectations, an unspoken rule grew with us” If you failed in doing something, it’s because you never tried enough”. I had a very challenging and argumentative nature growing up, not that my siblings were far different. Things were taking too seriously in our household. Sometimes I would get into petty fights with my siblings, accusing each other for cheating for the sake of not admitting our loss. Day by day, that competiveness in me grew, my ego right behind its heels
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IELTS essay Tell us your story. What unique opportunities or challenges have you experienced throughout your high school career?

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