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When I was in eighth grade, I remembered there was a boy moved into my class. He would be our classmate from then on, my teacher claimed. And at that time, since this boy was in my class, I hadn’t been anticipated that this boy would change my feeling as well as be my profound first love in the future. Genuinly, at first sight, my impression on him was not well. He was not only effeminicate but also arrogant. He had got white skin which every girl yearn for, nice smile and was good-looking in general, all the girls in my class were adored him. However, he wasn’t my type. This guy wasn’t even taller than me, I told to my friend. Somehow, he looked so feeble and fragile. Besides, I admited his intelligence, but I also had my distaste for him, he always had sharp arguments to oppose me in every problem, that accounted for the reason why I felt envy, and we were adversary that time. Then, I didn’t know if it was a coincidence or not, he took the same English extra course with me. Soon, I hadn’t been a fatalist but I was at that moment. He was sitting in front of me and talked a lot. Day by day, I felt bored, exhausted, be annoyed as well. In the next English extra course after a long summer with full of memories. We met each other again, he still had got nice smile, white skin but taller than me and be more mature. After that, the unpredictable thing was that I admired him because of his courtesy, brilliance and appearance. He exposed to me that he made a good impression on me on the first day we met each other in my class and he was trying to get my attention even negative one. Finally, he become my first love and was so nice with me during the time we were in junior high school. Then, when we were in high school, I broke up with him for some reasons and had a new girlfriend. However, we are still good friends and talk to each other comfortably. I really wantted to thank him for showing me how to love, that was a new feeling with me. That experience let me know what is love, it is pure and simple.
When I was in eighth grade, I remembered there was a boy
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moved
into my
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class
. He would be our classmate from then on, my teacher claimed. And at that time, since this boy was in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
, I hadn’t
been anticipated
that this boy would
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change
my feeling
as well
as be my profound
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first
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
love
in the future.

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Genuinly
, at
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first
sight, my impression on him was not well. He was not
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only
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effeminicate
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but
also
arrogant. He had
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got
white skin which every girl yearn for, nice smile and was
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good
-looking
in general
, all the girls in my
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class
were adored
him.
However
, he wasn’t my type. This guy wasn’t even taller than me, I
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told
to my friend. Somehow, he looked
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so
feeble and fragile.
Besides
, I
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admited
his intelligence,
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but
I
also
had my distaste for him, he always had sharp arguments to oppose me in every problem, that accounted for the reason why I felt envy, and we were adversary that time. Then, I didn’t know if it was a coincidence or not, he took the same English extra course with me.
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Soon
, I hadn’t been a fatalist
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but
I was at that moment. He was sitting in front of me and talked a lot. Day by day, I felt bored, exhausted,
be annoyed
as well
. In the
next
English extra course after a long summer with full of memories. We met each other again, he
still
had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
nice smile, white skin
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but
taller than me and be more mature. After that, the unpredictable thing was that I admired him
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because
of his courtesy, brilliance and appearance. He exposed to me that he made a
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good
impression on me on the
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first
day we met each other in my
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class and
he was trying to
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get
my attention even
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negative
one.
Finally
, he become my
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first
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love
and was
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so
nice with me during the time we were in junior high school.

Then, when we were in high school, I broke up with him for
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some
reasons and had a new girlfriend.
However
, we are
still
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good
friends and talk to each other
comfortably
. I
really
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wantted
to thank him for showing me how to
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love
, that was a new feeling with me. That experience
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let
me know what is
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love
, it is pure and simple.
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IELTS essay tell about your first love in your school

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
393 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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