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Technology and evolution of social networking

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Technology is flourishing by leaps and bounds and providing us new avenues while keeping ourselves updated with the latest news and current affairs. Therefore, a fair amount of people believe, a conventional way of newspaper reading will be disappeared. I do not completely accord with it because a conventional newspaper is an easiest and cheapest way to get news. To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting news are still popular. First of all, reading newspaper has become the ardent habit of many people. Everyone whether from affluent or middle class are seen desperately waiting for paper in morning and enjoy it reading with a cup of tea. Moreover, these are the portable, cheapest an easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can be carried from one place to other in the bag and available at economical price. It is so handy and merely by continuing flip of pages can make you omniscient. Secondly, electricity and other appliances are not required. Moreover, the other attachments are like icing on the cake. For instance, the Hindustan times has multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and so on. However, undoubtedly, technology has given the radical approach to reading news, for example, videos provide a full and clear view to reading besides that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that technophobic will be having no place in this ever-advanced modern world. To conclude, the lives of people are drastically affected by advanced versions of technology yet, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the existence of traditional newspaper and magazines
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new
avenues while keeping ourselves updated with the latest
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news
and
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current
affairs.
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amount of
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believe, a conventional way of
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newspaper
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reading
will
be disappeared
. I do not completely accord with it
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because
a conventional
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newspaper
is an easiest and cheapest way to
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get
news.

To embark on, there are multiple reasons why the traditional ways of getting
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news
are
still
popular.
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,
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reading
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newspaper
has become the ardent habit of
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many
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people
. Everyone whether from affluent or middle
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class
are
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seen
desperately
waiting for paper in morning and enjoy it
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reading
with a cup of tea.
Moreover
, these are the portable, cheapest
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an
easiest way of knowing about the global activities. It can
be carried
from one place to other in the bag and available at economical price. It is
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so
handy and
merely
by continuing flip of pages can
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make
you omniscient.
Secondly
, electricity and other appliances are not required.
Moreover
, the other attachments are like icing on the cake.
For instance
, the Hindustan times has multiple attachments like women’s fashion, career guide, culinary art and
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so
on.

However
,
undoubtedly
, technology has
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given
the radical approach to
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reading
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news
,
for example
, videos provide a full and
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clear
view to
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reading
besides
that we can download, share and forward it to our relatives and friends. Needless to say that
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technophobic
will be having no place in this ever-advanced modern world.

To conclude
, the
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lives
of
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people
are
drastically
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affected
by advanced versions of technology
yet
, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to the existence of traditional
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newspaper
and magazines
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IELTS essay Technology and evolution of social networking

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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