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All bullies should be expelled from school

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Bullying is a major problem in all schools. Many people claim that bullies shouldn’t be expelled from school because they think that it’s better to help bullies by changing their behaviour and help them resolve the situation. My thoughts are that bullies should be expelled from schools because they cause harm to other students and i think they should be separated from others. Bullies have no right to hurt or to beat up other students. They can hurt students in many ways. It can cause serious and lasting harm. They can make students quit school and never get the education they need. And it can seriously lead to sucide.
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bullies
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them resolve the situation. My thoughts are that
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bullies
should
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schools
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because
they cause harm to other
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students
and
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Bullies
have no right to hurt or to beat up other
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students
. They can hurt
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ways. It can cause serious and lasting harm. They can
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get
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IELTS essay All bullies should be expelled from school

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
109 words
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