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TASK 5: THE MAN NEED TO FINISH THE PAPER TONIGHT BUT HE HAS BEEN INVITED TO A CONCERT AT THE SAME TIME v.1

TASK 5: THE MAN NEED TO FINISH THE PAPER TONIGHT BUT HE HAS BEEN INVITED TO A CONCERT AT THE SAME TIME v. 1
THERE ARE LOTS OF CITIES WHERE PEOPLE FROM ALL OVER THE WORLD ARE RESIDENTED. BUT, NATIVES AND INTERNATIONALS CREATE SOME PROBLEMS WHEN THEY LIVE TOGETHER. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, AUTHORITIES CAN ENCOURAGE PEOPLE TO BAHAVE EFFECTIVELY WITHOUT MAKING DIFFRENCES. THEY CAN ALSO MAKE SOME RULES TO ENFORCE TO LIVE TOGETHER HARMONIOUSLY. IT IS SEEN IN MANY BIGGEST CITIES LIKE NEW YORK, MILAN AND SO MANY OTHERS WHERE DIFFERENT CULTURES OF PEOPLE LIVE TOGETHER. HOWEVER, THESE PEOPLE CREATE DIFFERENCES AND THIS IMPACT ON THE OVERALL ENVIRONMENT. I THINK, GOVERNMENT CAN MAKE SOME RULES, SO THEY CAN LIVE PEACEFULLY. FIRST OF ALL, THEY CAN PROVIDE SIMILAR FACILITIES TO ALL. FOR EXAMPLE, ALL PEOPLE SHOULD BE PAID EQUALLY WHETHER THEY ARE NATIVES OR OVERSEAS. IN THIS WAY, SOME OF THE PEOPLE WILL NOT HAVE REASON FOR FIGHTING AND THEY LIVE PEACEFULLY. ANOTHER TYPE OF RULE THAT AUTHORITIES CAN APPLY TO MAKE PEACEFULL ATMOSPHERE FOR LIVING TOGETHER IS THAT, THEY CAN ORGANIZE SOME FESTIVALS WHERE VARIOUS CULTURES OF PEOPLE CAN PARTICIPATE AND CELEBRATE THEM. BY JOINING IN THESE CELEBRATIONS, PEOPLE CAN BECOME AWARE OF OTHER CULTURES AND ACCEPT THEM WHICH CAN CREATE SOME STRONG RELATIONSHIPS. SO, THEY CAN ALL LIVE HARMONIOUSLY WITH EACH OTHER. ALL IN ALL, SOME OF THE BIGGEST CITIES ARE BEING COSMOPOLITAN WITH THE PEOPLE FROM DIFFERENT NATIONS WHO ARE LIVING TOGETHER, BUT CREATING THE ATMOSPHERE PEACELESS. I BELIEVE, GOVERNMENT CAN TACKLE BY IMPOSSING SOME RULES SUCH AS GIVING EQUAL TYPE OF FACILITIES AND ORGANIZING FESTIVALS, SO THEY CAN LIVE PEACEFULLY.
THERE ARE LOTS OF CITIES WHERE
PEOPLE
FROM ALL OVER THE WORLD ARE
RESIDENTED
.
BUT
, NATIVES AND INTERNATIONALS CREATE
SOME
PROBLEMS WHEN THEY
LIVE
TOGETHER. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, AUTHORITIES CAN ENCOURAGE
PEOPLE
TO
BAHAVE
EFFECTIVELY
WITHOUT MAKING
DIFFRENCES
. THEY CAN
ALSO
MAKE
SOME
RULES
TO ENFORCE TO
LIVE
TOGETHER
HARMONIOUSLY
.

IT IS
SEEN
IN
MANY
BIGGEST CITIES LIKE NEW YORK, MILAN AND
SO
MANY
OTHERS WHERE
DIFFERENT
CULTURES OF
PEOPLE
LIVE
TOGETHER.
HOWEVER
, THESE
PEOPLE
CREATE DIFFERENCES AND THIS IMPACT ON THE
OVERALL
ENVIRONMENT. I
THINK
,
GOVERNMENT
CAN
MAKE
SOME
RULES
,
SO
THEY CAN
LIVE
PEACEFULLY
.
FIRST OF ALL
, THEY CAN PROVIDE SIMILAR FACILITIES TO ALL.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ALL
PEOPLE
SHOULD
BE PAID
EQUALLY
WHETHER THEY ARE NATIVES OR OVERSEAS. IN THIS WAY,
SOME OF THE
PEOPLE
WILL NOT HAVE REASON FOR FIGHTING AND THEY
LIVE
PEACEFULLY
.

ANOTHER TYPE OF
RULE
THAT AUTHORITIES CAN APPLY TO
MAKE
PEACEFULL
ATMOSPHERE FOR LIVING TOGETHER IS THAT, THEY CAN ORGANIZE
SOME
FESTIVALS WHERE VARIOUS CULTURES OF
PEOPLE
CAN PARTICIPATE AND CELEBRATE THEM. BY JOINING IN THESE CELEBRATIONS,
PEOPLE
CAN BECOME AWARE OF OTHER CULTURES AND ACCEPT THEM WHICH CAN CREATE
SOME
STRONG RELATIONSHIPS.
SO
, THEY CAN ALL
LIVE
HARMONIOUSLY
WITH EACH OTHER.

ALL IN ALL,
SOME
OF THE BIGGEST CITIES ARE BEING COSMOPOLITAN WITH THE
PEOPLE
FROM
DIFFERENT
NATIONS WHO ARE LIVING TOGETHER,
BUT
CREATING THE ATMOSPHERE
PEACELESS
. I BELIEVE,
GOVERNMENT
CAN TACKLE BY
IMPOSSING
SOME
RULES
SUCH AS GIVING EQUAL TYPE OF FACILITIES AND ORGANIZING FESTIVALS,
SO
THEY CAN
LIVE
PEACEFULLY
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TASK 5: THE MAN NEED TO FINISH THE PAPER TONIGHT BUT HE HAS BEEN INVITED TO A CONCERT AT THE SAME TIME v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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