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Students these days prefer to take a year off between finishing school and pursuing higher studies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Write at least 250 words

Students these days prefer to take a year off between finishing school and pursuing higher studies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? oRkNV
Nowadays, many students prefer to take a year off in between finishing the school and taking admission for higher education. In this essay, I will discuss some of the advantages as well as disadvantages of the given statement in the subsequent paragraphs. There are numerous merits of the given statement. Primarily, students would be able to refresh their minds from burden. To explicate, nodoubt, not only the adults but also the children are under a huge burden, especially in these days, likewise of studies and many more. If students will take a break after the completion of their studies then they would back to their studies with more energy and would much dedicated towards studies. For instance, in country America, in many schools and colleges authority provides one year off for the students, so they can rejuvenate themselves. Moreover, students can make a correct decision for their carrer. To substantiate, matriculation is the turning point of students life. Because, after tenth standard pupils decides so, which stream they have to choose or not such as, non-medical, commerce and other options. If students will select a wrong stream then they may spoil their whole career as future of a student is totally dependent on the senior secondary stream. For example, if a student choose non-medical stream then he can persue his carrer in science field. On the flip side, first and foremost demerit of the given statement is that if schools offer a year off for the students then the income of the school or college will fell down. Because a school income is totally dependent on the students fees. With the help of children school fees school improve its facilities for students. Nextly, along with schols and universties, teachers and other staff members will also face lots of problem. To illustrate it, if students would not come to school for study purposes then they would not give their fees in which the teachers will not get their salaries. In this way, the staff members would not be able to sustain the basic needs of their family members. In conclusion, I believe that although students should take a year off from their studies when they are looking for their higher education, but I strongly believe that a year would be too long break for the students and also create problems for the school and universities.
Nowadays,
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prefer to take a
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off
in between finishing the
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school
and taking admission for higher education. In this essay, I will discuss
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some of the
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as disadvantages of the
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statement in the subsequent paragraphs.

There are numerous merits of the
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statement.
Primarily
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students
would be able to refresh their minds from burden. To explicate,
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nodoubt
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the adults
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the children are under a huge burden,
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and
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will take
a break after the completion of their
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then they would back to their
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with more energy and would much dedicated towards
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studies
.
For instance
, in country America, in
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schools
and colleges authority provides one
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year
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off
for the
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students
,
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they can rejuvenate themselves.
Moreover
,
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students
can
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make
a correct decision for their
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carrer
. To substantiate, matriculation is the turning point of
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students
life.
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, after tenth standard pupils decides
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, which
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stream
they
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have to
choose or not such as, non-medical, commerce and other options. If
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students
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will select
a
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wrong
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stream
then they may spoil their whole career as future of a
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student
is
totally
dependent on the senior secondary
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stream
.
For example
, if a
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student
choose non-medical
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stream
then he can
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persue
his
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carrer
in science field.

On the flip side,
first
and foremost demerit of the
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statement is that if
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schools
offer a
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for the
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students
then the income of the
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school
or college will
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fell
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Because
a
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income is
totally
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fees. With the
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help
of children
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school
fees
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school
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improve
its facilities for
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students
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, along with
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schols
and
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universties
, teachers and other staff members will
also
face
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would not
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to
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for
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purposes then they would not give their fees in which the teachers will not
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get
their salaries. In this way, the staff members would not be able to sustain the basic needs of their family members.

In conclusion
, I believe that although
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students
should take a
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year
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off
from their
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studies
when they are looking for their higher education,
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I
strongly
believe that a
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year
would be too long break for the
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students
and
also
create problems for the
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school
and universities.
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IELTS essay Students these days prefer to take a year off between finishing school and pursuing higher studies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
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