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Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In the recent times, human beings relay on punishing as well as appreciating the students however, it is extremely difficult to project which way is excellent to deliver optimum result from the school children. In my point of view, congratulating is the supreme method to reach the pinnacle of each and every school learners. This essay exhibits various aspects of exhorting the reward system in the education centers. Over the decades, majority of the countries educational organization adapted penalizing for the improvement of school children on the other hand, many of these institutions are enormously failed to hatch positive outcome while imposing various punishments to the school kids. Moreover, according to several World famous child psychology specialists concentrating more on penalizing school children precipitate hair-raising repercussions to the community. For instance, juveniles those who are punished constantly in the learning centers are likely to participate dangerous lawful activities furthermore, there should be a great chance of becoming notorious miscreants. Nevertheless, it is astonishing fact that adolescents those who are engaging their studies in the curriculum centers treated with reward as well as variety of awards display high level of enthusiasm and meticulous responds to their education. In addition to that, students who are undergoing persistent punishments in educational centers have a huge chance of falling down to deep adversity and trauma following this, such penalizing act in the school eventually produce criminals and offenders to the society. Even though, keeping punishments never create any benefit to the school children meanwhile, it perpetuates serious consequences to the public. To conclude, in my opinion, maintaining a appreciating atmosphere in the class room ultimately assist the young generation to achieve ultimate point.
In the recent times, human beings relay on punishing
as well
as appreciating the students
however
, it is
extremely
difficult to project which way is excellent to deliver optimum result from the
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school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. In my point of view, congratulating is the supreme method to reach the pinnacle of each and every
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
learners. This essay exhibits various aspects of exhorting the reward system in the education centers.

Over the decades, majority of the countries educational organization adapted penalizing for the improvement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
on the other hand
,
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many
of these institutions are
enormously
failed to hatch
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positive
outcome while imposing various punishments to the
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school
kids.
Moreover
, according to several World
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famous
child psychology specialists concentrating more on penalizing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
precipitate hair-raising repercussions to the community.
For instance
, juveniles those who
are punished
constantly
in the learning centers are likely to participate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
lawful activities
furthermore
, there should be a great chance of becoming notorious miscreants.
Nevertheless
, it is astonishing fact that adolescents those who are engaging their studies in the curriculum centers treated with reward
as well
as variety of awards display high level of enthusiasm and meticulous responds to their education.

In addition
to that, students who are undergoing persistent punishments in educational centers have a huge chance of falling down to deep adversity and trauma following this, such penalizing act in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
eventually
produce criminals and offenders to the society.
Even though
, keeping punishments never create any benefit to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
meanwhile, it perpetuates serious
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consequences to
the public.

To conclude
, in my opinion, maintaining
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a
appreciating atmosphere in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
room
ultimately
assist the young generation to achieve ultimate point.
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IELTS essay Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
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