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Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do yot think causes of this? What solution we can suggest?

Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do yot think causes of this? What solution we can suggest? GMN3m
More and more people are becoming susceptible to stress-related ailments; consequently, this ubiquitous concern evokes heated debate about the origin of decreasing health condition in our society. What are the most aparent reasons of increasing stress-related sicknesses and is there any fisible solution to individually overcome those illnesses or authorities should take action to reduce stress triggers? The amenities of modern world we live in today reflects on our lifesyle leading to greater comfort and convenience as well as limiting physical activity in the daily basis. Improvents in technology and rapid globalization have made much more possible to take advantage of, for example, vehicles. Thus, people instead of walking or commiting to work by bicycle, prefer to transport by car. Cortisol hormone directly correlated to stress can be significantly deacresed in human’s body, if they will lead active lifestyle. Moreover, people are working longer hours than even before. Workforce is a competitive domain, where every employee is subjected to stress, pressure, critisim in order to meet the targets. This often results in mental and physical suffering because they have to work overtime. Maintaining a good work-life balance and including more physcial activites a day are both critical to mitigating stress related illnesses. People need to be conscious towards their life and realise if they will live only for work they will suffer either mentally or physically and a seddentary lifestyle will futher exaccerbate these issues. Book “Say stop to anxiety and depression” is a good example how to stay afloat and persistent. Some people who read that book were convienced that sport and suitable management of affairs play the substantial role in healthy lifestyle. Balancing work, recreation and sport will not only prevent ilnesses, but will drastically ameliorate individual’s both physical and mental state. To sum up, despite of that more and more people suffering from anxiety and stress-related sicknesses, there are implementable twofold ways to alleviate causes of these issues: organizing and proritizing main things in one’s life and conducting active way of life.
More and more
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people
are becoming susceptible to
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stress
-related ailments;
consequently
, this ubiquitous concern evokes heated debate about the origin of decreasing health condition in our society. What are the most
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aparent
reasons of increasing
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stress
-related sicknesses and is there any
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fisible
solution to
individually
overcome those illnesses or authorities should take action to
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reduce
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stress
triggers?

The amenities of modern world we
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live
in
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today
reflects on our
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lifesyle
leading to greater comfort and convenience
as well
as limiting physical activity in the daily basis.
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Improvents
in technology and rapid globalization have made much more possible to take advantage of,
for example
, vehicles.
Thus
,
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people
instead
of walking or
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commiting
to
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work
by bicycle, prefer to transport by car. Cortisol hormone
directly
correlated to
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stress
can be
significantly
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deacresed
in human’s body, if they will lead active lifestyle.
Moreover
,
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people
are working longer hours than even
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before
. Workforce is a competitive domain, where every employee
is subjected
to
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stress
, pressure,
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critisim
in order to
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meet
the targets. This
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often
results in mental and physical suffering
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because
they
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have to
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work
overtime.

Maintaining a
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good
work-life balance and including more
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physcial
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activites
a day are both critical to mitigating
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stress
related illnesses.
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People
need to be conscious towards their life and
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realise
if they will
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live
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only
for
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work
they will suffer either mentally or
physically
and a
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seddentary
lifestyle will
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futher
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exaccerbate
these issues. Book “Say
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stop
to anxiety and depression” is a
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good
example how to stay afloat and persistent.
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Some
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people
who read that book were
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convienced
that sport and suitable management of affairs play the substantial role in healthy lifestyle. Balancing
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work
, recreation and sport will not
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only
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prevent
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ilnesses
,
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but
will
drastically
ameliorate individual’s both physical and mental state.

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despite of
that more and more
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people
suffering from anxiety and
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stress
-related sicknesses, there are implementable twofold ways to alleviate causes of these issues: organizing and
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proritizing
main things in one’s life and conducting active way of life.
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IELTS essay Stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. What do yot think causes of this? What solution we can suggest?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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