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Story about social media

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نیلوفر جعفری: usually follow my news on TV and I think it is the best way because TV news, despite broadcasting at different times, brings us the latest news every time, and the same can be said as a reason for forgetting the radio. The news covered by the radio is a bit low quality and without any updates, but there is another way to get the news of the newspaper, which is not as popular as the radio, and this problem can be solved only with the thinking of the officials. The last way I follow the news It is the most portable source of mobile phones, which means I follow the news with the media
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on TV and I
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TV
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, despite broadcasting at
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different
times, brings us the latest
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every time, and the same can
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as a reason for forgetting the radio. The
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covered by the radio is a bit low quality and without any updates,
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but
there is another way to
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get
the
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of the newspaper, which is not as popular as the radio, and this problem can
be solved
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only
with the thinking of the officials. The last way I follow the
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news
It is the most portable source of mobile phones, which means I follow the
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with the
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media

IELTS essay Story about social media

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
116 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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