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spending larger on railways or less

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As population is enlarging day by day, the demand for new and efficient transportation is emerging. People want hustle free travelling to save their time and energy. Public transportation makes life of people easy in terms of cost and travel, there are various communal vehicles most commonly used are buses and trains. People have different opinion about both modes regarding their comfort, time and expense. Some opine that trains are best to use and should be refurbish by investing more. However, other believes to distribute budget equally among all channels of transport. In this essay I shall analyze and shed ample light on both views of people prior to forming a concrete opinion. First and foremost, for a number of reasons, multitudes of people reckon that trains are most effective and fastest way to reach their desired destination. Firstly, using train saves up a lot of time; there is no traffic jams like on roads. For instance, it is most suitable mode of travelling for workers and students to reach on time. Secondly, railways are also beneficial for tourists, who want to visit from one city to other. They provide good sitting comfort and view. Finally, it can be used to carry larger number of passengers, one of the most competitive edges over other methods of transport. To gain, all of these and plethora of other advantageous it needs larger amount of spending. Contrary, to this people also count some of the demerits of being wasting too much money on railway line expansion and enhancement. To begin, constructing a new rail network, will acquire a high amount of budget, and it will result in cutting the finances of other transportation mediums. For example, repairing high ways and motorways will boost up the usage of cars and buses. And also be useful for people who travel by their own cars. Furthermore, focusing only on one niche will cut of employment opportunities for others. Such as, there will be more demand for train manufactures, constructors and drivers rather than buses ones. In conclusion, public transport by any means is essential for people. And as per my view all modes of transport should be taken in consider to be widen or modified according to need of users. Railways account for more benefits, thus spending on trains structural requirement may result into better way of travelling.
As population is enlarging day by day, the demand for new and efficient transportation is emerging.
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People
want hustle free travelling to save their
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time
and energy. Public transportation
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makes
life of
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people
easy in terms of cost and travel, there are various communal vehicles most
commonly
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used
are buses and
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trains
.
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People
have
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different
opinion about both modes regarding their comfort,
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time
and expense.
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Some
opine that
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trains
are best to
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use
and should be
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refurbish
by investing more.
However
,
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other
believes to distribute budget
equally
among all channels of
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transport
. In this essay I shall analyze and shed ample light on both views of
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people
prior to forming a concrete opinion.

First
and foremost, for a number of reasons, multitudes of
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people
reckon that
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trains
are most effective and fastest way to reach their desired destination.
Firstly
, using
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train
saves up
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a lot of
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time
; there is no traffic jams like on roads.
For instance
, it is
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most
suitable mode of travelling for workers and students to reach on
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time
.
Secondly
, railways are
also
beneficial for tourists, who want to visit from one city to
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other
. They provide
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good
sitting comfort and view.
Finally
, it can be
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used
to carry larger number of passengers, one of the most competitive edges over
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other
methods of
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transport
. To gain, all of these and plethora of
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other
advantageous it needs larger amount of spending.

Contrary, to this
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people
also
count
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some of the
demerits of being wasting too much money on railway line expansion and enhancement. To
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begin
, constructing a new rail network, will acquire a high amount of budget, and it will result in cutting the finances of
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other
transportation mediums.
For example
, repairing high ways and motorways will boost up the usage of cars and buses. And
also
be useful for
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people
who travel by their
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own
cars.
Furthermore
, focusing
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only
on one niche will
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cut
of employment opportunities for others. Such as, there will be more demand for
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train
manufactures, constructors and drivers
rather
than buses ones.

In conclusion
, public
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transport
by any means is essential for
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people
. And as per my view all modes of
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transport
should
be taken
in consider to be
Consider using a past participle here: "widened".
widen
or modified according to need of users. Railways account for more benefits,
thus
spending on
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trains
structural requirement may result into better way of travelling.
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IELTS essay spending larger on railways or less

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
392 words
6.0
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