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Sometimes an event that seems to be going badly turns out well after all. Discuss such an event in your life, using specific details your support your response.

Sometimes an event that seems to be going badly turns out well after all. Discuss such an event in your life, using specific details your support your response. m19Yq
People want to live with the best standards of living. If they do not have any heritage from their parents, they try to catch up with these good standards by working hard and believing that they can achieve this. In my opinion, every time this thesis is not viable because only working hard is not enough for the change without having a proper aim. First of all, I wanted to change something in my life because I did not inherit anything from my parents to enhance my standards of living. Only thinking of changing was not enough for me because I had an idea that supported this aim at the same time. When I was seven years old, I decided to be a doctor because I thought and believed that if I were a doctor, I could change my life. When I grew up, I started to work hard for that especially in the years of high school. I approached my achievements day by day and as a result. I graduated from high school with a high score but I could not enter the medical faculty. This was disappointing for me. I had to decide on either to start an educational institution in a different department or to prepare for the medicine faculty again. I made up my mind to start my university education in Mechanical Engineering department. Therefore, I had to change my dream and I became a Mechanical Engineer but this was not the worst thing for my life because I had an ambition that was to be the most successful and richest person among my colleagues. When I was a student at university, I worked determinedly and decided to alter one thing in my life. That was my dream. I graduated from university and began to follow my master's degree in one of the most famous universities in Turkey. I felt that my life started to be different. After I finished the course period in the master's degree program, I moved to Ankara from Kocaeli and I found a job that helped me with my ideal. Nowadays, I am a candidate for a PhD student and I am approaching my ideal. In my opinion, the best way to be a successful person in your academic career is to have an academic background in a university because thanks to that you can achieve your goal. To sum up, when I was a primary school student, my goal was to become a doctor but now I am in a different place from what I thought. While sometimes some events can be bad their results can be surprisingly well. Now, I have an idea again, but I am going to achieve it in a different way. That is how it works for me.
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People
want to
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live
with the best standards of living. If they do not have any heritage from their parents, they try to catch up with these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
standards by working
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
and believing that they can achieve this. In my opinion, every time this thesis is not viable
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because
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only
working
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hard
is not
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enough
for the
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change
without having a proper aim.

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First of all
, I wanted to
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change
something in my
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life
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because
I did not inherit anything from my parents to enhance my standards of living.
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Only
thinking of changing was not
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enough
for me
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because
I had an
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idea
that supported this aim at the same time. When I was seven years
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old
, I decided to be a doctor
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because
I
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thought
and believed that if I were a doctor, I could
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change
my
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life
. When I grew up, I
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started
to work
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hard
for that
especially
in the years of high school. I approached my achievements day by day and
as a result
. I graduated from high school with a high score
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but
I could not enter the medical faculty. This was disappointing for me. I had to decide on either to
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start
an educational institution in a
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different
department or to prepare for the medicine faculty again. I made up my mind to
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start
my
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university
education in Mechanical Engineering department.

Therefore
, I had to
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change
my dream and I became a Mechanical Engineer
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but
this was not the worst thing for my
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life
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because
I had an ambition that was to be the most successful and richest person among my colleagues. When I was a student at
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university
, I worked
determinedly
and decided to alter one thing in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
. That was my dream. I graduated from
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university
and began to follow my master's degree in one of the most
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famous
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universities
in Turkey. I felt that my
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life
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started
to be
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different
. After I finished the course period in the master's degree program, I
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moved
to Ankara from
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Kocaeli
and I found a job that
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helped
me with my ideal. Nowadays, I am a candidate for a PhD
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student and
I am approaching my ideal. In my opinion, the best way to be a successful person in your academic career is to have an academic background in a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
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because
thanks to that you can achieve your goal.

To sum up, when I was a primary school student, my goal was to become a doctor
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but
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now
I am in a
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different
place from what I
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thought
.
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While
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sometimes
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some
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events
can be
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bad
their results can be
surprisingly
well.
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Now
, I have an
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idea
again,
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but
I am going to achieve it in a
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different
way.
That is
how it works for me.
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IELTS essay Sometimes an event that seems to be going badly turns out well after all. Discuss such an event in your life, using specific details your support your response.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
463 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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