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More and more people are thinking of retiring early. Instead of waiting until the end of working age to stop working, they have an early need to spend time with their family and themselves, enjoying life. To ensure that without working, you can still live the life you want. First of all, if you want to have a comfortable life after retirement, you need to have a solid financial foundation. You have to pay off all your debts in order to enjoy the rest of your life after retirement. Debt and expenses will put a lot of pressure on your retirement finances. At the same time, you need to determine the income that will be achieved after retirement. It is especially important that once you have decided to retire, you must protect your wealth. Adjust your portfolio to a more conservative investment strategy, interest rates may decrease but stability and safety will be maintained.
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. Debt and expenses will put
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finances. At the same time, you need to determine the income that will
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IELTS essay some ways for retirements

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
154 words
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