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Some students learn better by reading, other students learn more by listening to lecturer, which way is better for you and why, explain in details with examples? v.1

Some students learn better by reading, other students learn more by listening to lecturer, which way is better for you and why, explain in details with examples? v. 1
Staying in an apartment flat as opposed to dormitory living has benefits and drawbacks. This essay will explore the highlights and challenges of this circumstance. In my opinion, I strongly favour the idea of having a private area off campus as opposed to the unpleasant living set-up in school premises. To begin with, the most striking positive consequence of choosing an apartment as a dwelling place is freedom and space. Unlike in provided-school accommodations, where a number of students share a room with two or three other students, the convenience of getting an own apartment is certainly imperative to heath and well being. For instance, a research paper has suggested that students who have their own bedroom do well in academics as compared to those who are staying in a cramped living conditions. In that sense, the set-up that apartment can provide is clearly advantageous to pupils. On the downside, a major inconvenience is in relation to financial considerations. If an individual is economically challenged, it would be an additional burden to the student. It can then affect these person's performance because being financially free of obligation is always a huge factor in life. Like in the case of a working student who needs to work extra in order to pay rent, the mindset of having to maintain a high income will absolutely affect the overall happiness and perspective of that person. On that ground, the need to get an apartment will have to be given somewhat less priority and consider the option to stay in the dormitory. To summarize, although apartment stays can result to negative implications, it is certainly advantageous to students in terms of their overall welfare.
Staying in an
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apartment
flat as opposed to dormitory living has benefits and drawbacks. This essay will explore the highlights and challenges of this circumstance. In my opinion, I
strongly
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idea
of having a private area off campus as opposed to the unpleasant living set-up in school premises.

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begin
with, the most striking
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positive
consequence of choosing an
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apartment
as a dwelling place is freedom and space. Unlike in provided-school accommodations, where a number of
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students
share a room with two or three other
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students
, the convenience of getting an
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own
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apartment
is
certainly
imperative to heath and
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well being
.
For instance
, a research paper has suggested that
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students
who have their
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own
bedroom do well in academics as compared to those who are staying in a cramped living conditions. In that sense, the set-up that
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apartment
can provide is
clearly
advantageous to pupils.

On the downside, a major inconvenience is in relation to financial considerations. If an individual is
economically
challenged, it would be an additional burden to the
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student
. It can then affect
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these person
's performance
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because
being
financially
free of obligation is always a huge factor in life. Like in the case of a working
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student
who needs to work extra in order to pay rent, the mindset of having to maintain a high income will
absolutely
affect the
overall
happiness and perspective of that person. On that ground, the need to
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get
an
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apartment
will
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have to
be
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given
somewhat less priority and consider the option to stay in the dormitory.

To summarize
, although
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apartment
stays can result to
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negative
implications, it is
certainly
advantageous to
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students
in terms of their
overall
welfare.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some students learn better by reading, other students learn more by listening to lecturer, which way is better for you and why, explain in details with examples? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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