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Some say that urban living has many benefits compared to rural living. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

Some say that urban living has many benefits compared to rural living. What are the advantages and disadvantages? g5AKg
Nowadays, large cities are becoming more and more inhabited. People are increasingly choosing to live in urban areas because of some advantages it has compared with living in the countryside. However, despite its benefits, it has also drawbacks. In this essay, I shall discuss the pros and cons of living in a large city. To commence with, one of the benefits of city living is a higher job opportunity. Companies, government agencies and factories are mostly situated in the city, these establishments need employees in their operation, and it is often the case that they offer employment to people who are living nearby. For instance, in the City of Manila, 60 per cent of the total national jobs are offered within the city and practically most of the employees are city dwellers. Another benefit of city living is a better quality of education. Schools in the city have better education facilities such as the latest computers and better-trained teacher. They are also updated with the latest technology that promotes better learning such as complete laboratory equipment. In contrast, a lot of schools in outskirts are mostly using the traditional way of teaching, using a textbook and most of the time lacking educational equipment and practical training. Truly an outstanding education and better work prospect can make cities suitable to live in. On the other hand, air pollution is one of the major disadvantages of living in the city. The presence of cars and factories, that pollute the air by emitting carbon dioxide, sometimes make urban living uncomfortable. This could cause illnesses like cough and colds and other respiratory illness. Unlike in the countryside, the air quality is superb due to the absence of pollution and an abundance of trees, which is a vital source of oxygen. Another concern of city living is the high criminality rate. Robbery, theft and murder are commonly being committed because some individuals are economically challenged. In a recent survey conducted 65 per cent of the crimes in the Philippines happened in big cities. Battling pollution and avoiding being a victim of a villain is a challenge among metropolis dwellers. To conclude, although living in the city possess benefits such as job opportunity and better education, it has also its drawbacks like high crime rate and air pollution that is a health hazard. One should take a careful step and must consider these pros and cons before deciding whether to live in city or not.
Nowadays, large
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cities
are becoming more and more inhabited.
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People
are
increasingly
choosing to
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live
in urban areas
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because
of
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some
advantages it has compared with
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living
in the countryside.
However
, despite its
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benefits
, it has
also
drawbacks. In this essay, I shall discuss the pros and cons of
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living
in a large city.

To commence with, one of the
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benefits
of city
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living
is a higher job opportunity.
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Companies
,
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government
agencies and factories are
mostly
situated in the city, these establishments need employees in their operation, and it is
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often
the case that they offer employment to
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people
who are
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living
nearby.
For instance
, in the City of Manila, 60 per cent of the total national jobs
are offered
within the city and
practically
most of the employees are city dwellers. Another
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benefit
of city
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living
is a
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better
quality of
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education
. Schools in the city have
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better
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education
facilities such as the latest computers and better-trained teacher. They are
also
updated with the latest technology that promotes
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better
learning such as complete laboratory equipment.
In contrast
,
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a lot of
schools in outskirts are
mostly
using the traditional way of teaching, using a textbook and most of the time lacking educational equipment and practical training.
Truly
an outstanding
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education
and
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better
work prospect can
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make
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cities
suitable to
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live
in.

On the other hand
,
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air
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pollution
is one of the major disadvantages of
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living
in the city. The presence of cars and factories, that pollute the
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air
by emitting carbon dioxide,
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sometimes
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make
urban
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living
uncomfortable. This could cause illnesses like cough and colds and other respiratory illness. Unlike in the countryside, the
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air
quality is superb due to the absence of
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pollution
and an abundance of trees, which is a vital source of oxygen. Another concern of city
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living
is the high criminality rate. Robbery, theft and murder are
commonly
being committed
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because
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some
individuals are
economically
challenged. In a recent survey conducted 65 per cent of the crimes in the Philippines happened in
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big
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cities
. Battling
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pollution
and avoiding being a victim of a villain is a challenge among metropolis dwellers.

To conclude
, although
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living
in the city possess
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benefits
such as job opportunity and
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better
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education
, it has
also
its drawbacks like high crime rate and
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air
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pollution
that is
a health hazard. One should take a careful step and
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must
consider these pros and cons
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before
deciding whether to
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live
in city or not.
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IELTS essay Some say that urban living has many benefits compared to rural living. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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4 paragraphs
409 words
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